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writing/post-self/toledot/launch/launch/Codrin-castor/003.md

@@ -38,7 +38,7 @@ Hiding a grimace behind a sip of eir own espresso, Codrin jotted down the author
 
 "If we could--" Ey cut emself off and recomposed eir plastic smile. "I've heard that you are working on a project that capitalizes on this. Can you expand on that?"
 
-"Of course! Of course. I will always help a fellow writer." He set his cup aside and made a grand sweep of his arm. "You look around you, and you see so many going about their lives as the might have otherwise. Even I am guilty of the dalliance of getting up, drinking coffee, perhaps sitting and reading a while. We lucky few--" Codrin knew that some two and a half billion personalities were on the launches, but ey declined to comment. "--can draw so much inspiration from a project on so grand a scale. My project is one that utilizes the base nature of a personality embedded in a system that cares not for consistency between its two constituent parts.
+"Of course! Of course. I will always help a fellow writer." He set his cup aside and made a grand sweep of his arm. "You look around you, and you see so many going about their lives as they might have otherwise. Even I am guilty of the dalliance of getting up, drinking coffee, perhaps sitting and reading a while. We lucky few--" Codrin knew that some two and a half billion personalities were on the launches, but ey declined to comment. "--can draw so much inspiration from a project on so grand a scale. My project is one that utilizes the base nature of a personality embedded in a system that cares not for consistency between its two constituent parts.
 
 "Before I disappeared from the L<sub>5</sub> system, I wrote an outline for a new book describing the universal feelings of exploration that are bound up in this endeavor, and now I am working writing the book which follows that outline. My counterpart on the Pollux launch is doing the same --- he had better be! --- and we are sending the results of our labors back to the System to an editor who is a most trusted companion, and he is compiling them into a single book which will serve to showcase the similarities and differences that one mind can hold when it has lost a unifying sense of self!"
 

writing/post-self/toledot/launch/launch/Codrin-pollux/003.md

@@ -8,7 +8,7 @@ When ey showed it to Dear, the fox's ears stood erect, and it led Codrin out of
 
 "Do I have something to worry about? Should I be prepared for violence or something?"
 
-It should its head. *"I do not think so, no. Ezekiel was a member of the Council of Eight. One of the founders. He was close to much that happened in the early history of the System."*
+It shook its head. *"I do not think so, no. Ezekiel was a member of the Council of Eight. One of the founders. He was close to much that happened in the early history of the System."*
 
 "What did he do?" Codrin shook eir head. "I mean, what is it that he's known for?"
 
@@ -112,7 +112,7 @@ Ezekiel must be the prophet, and surely Michelle was the broken one. Ey didn't k
 
 "Guide towards Secession?"
 
-"Not at first. At first, we were to be one people in two forms: those who had life entire on the earth that God set before them, and those who lived beyond death. Those who lived on Earth saw the idolatry in the System and with the help of True Name and the Jonah, built up a religion of separation, that we be two people in two forms."
+"Not at first. At first, we were to be one people in two forms: those who had life entire on the earth that God set before them, and those who lived beyond death. Those who lived on Earth saw the idolatry in the System and with the help of True Name and Jonah, built up a religion of separation, that we be two people in two forms."
 
 "True Name?"
 

writing/post-self/toledot/launch/sys/Ioan/005.md

@@ -86,7 +86,7 @@ That evening, back at eir house, after ey had merged eir work-forks, after ey ha
 
 "You were frowning. What happened? Getting tired of my cooking?"
 
-"No, it's good. Just thinking about something Codrin#Castor talked about today." Ey stabbed at a spear of asparagus. "Ey interviewed some asshole author was working on a book on both launches, but intentionally not communicating to see how they would diverge."
+"No, it's good. Just thinking about something Codrin#Castor talked about today." Ey stabbed at a spear of asparagus. "Ey interviewed some asshole author who was working on a book on both launches, but intentionally not communicating to see how they would diverge."
 
 "Sounds fun enough," May said. "But, if I am thinking of the same author, it will be quite boring."
 

writing/post-self/toledot/secession/sys/Michelle/003.md

@@ -106,7 +106,7 @@ All she could do was shake her head before emotion completely overwhelmed her. S
 
 "I'm sorry, Sasha."
 
-"No. It is alright." She rolled onto her back, picking up the fallen flower-crown and reaching it up to drape it over the weasel's head. "The System may act as a magnifying glass on some of that I was going through before uploading, but much of what I feel now I was going through before, just less visibly."
+"No. It is alright." She rolled onto her back, picking up the fallen flower-crown and reaching it up to drape it over the weasel's head. "The System may act as a magnifying glass on some of what I was going through before uploading, but much of what I feel now I was going through before, just less visibly."
 
 "Alright." He straightened the loop of golden flowers atop his head, ruffled a paw over her ears, and then leaned back, propping himself up with his paws in the grass.