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-Names bear power, I promise myself, my characters promise each other. Names bear power and yet we are in so many ways beholden to them. They bear power over us, even if we don't want them to. They bear power over us sometimes *because* we don't want them to. We don't choose them, do we? At least most of us don't. The vast majority don't, even, to the point where the joke goes in trans circles, "Nice name, did your mom pick that out for you?"
+Names bear power, I promise myself, my characters promise each other. Names bear power and are in so many ways beholden to them. They bear power over us, even if we beg that they not. They bear power over us sometimes *because* we beg that they not. We so rarely, if at all. The vast majority will never name themselves — nice name, did your mom pick it out for you? — and of those that do, how many name themselves in a vacuum, without considering the whims of the world around them?
 
 It's true enough, more often than not.