update from sparkleup

writing/post-self/mitzvot/007.md

@@ -14,23 +14,27 @@ Ey'd shrugged. "Sure. We'd get dumped on once or twice a year."
 
 She'd laughed at em, then, shaking her head. "I like our porch swing. I like our lilacs and dandelions. Sometimes, I just want to lay in the grass and overheat. I have been betrayed by our weather."
 
-So it was a good out when it got cold. They could duck off, alone or together, to the lake and head for a walk.
+So it was a good escape when it got cold. They could duck off, alone or together, to the lake and head for a walk.
 
-May had chosen the name Arrowhead Lake over Ioan's protests that it looked nothing like an arrowhead, being more kidney shaped. The sim was called Peak Lake#587a9383. Maybe it was just Peak lake? This seemed to have only emboldened her, and ey was firmly overruled. 
+May had chosen the name Arrowhead Lake over Ioan's protests that it looked nothing like an arrowhead, being more kidney shaped. The sim itself was tagged Peak Lake#587a9383. Maybe it was just Peak lake? This seemed to have only emboldened her when ey brought it up, and ey was firmly overruled. 
 
-Whenever ey walked out there without her, as ey did today, ey'd think about this. Maybe it had little to do with the lake itself. Maybe it had to do with the silhouettes of the pines, or something to do with way the snow lingered on pointed peaks.
+Whenever ey walked out there without her, as ey did today, ey'd ruminate on this. Maybe it had little to do with the lake itself. Maybe it had to do with the silhouettes of the pines? Or something to do with way the snow lingered on pointed peaks?
 
 "Or maybe she's just a brat," ey mumbled, smiling to emself as ey walked slowly along the deer trail. "No reasoning with an Odist."
 
-Ey'd never been able to pick apart whether or not they were just normal people. Perhaps Michelle had been --- ey'd not spent enough time around her to know, and what time ey had managed had been mostly silence. Toward the end, her conversations were more interruptions than not, and although the impression ey'd gotten was that she'd been kind, gentle, while still being the type to care passionately about things or, more often, people. The impression just hadn't been a strong one, not enough time to for it to solidify.
+Ey'd never been able to pick apart whether or not they were just normal people. Perhaps Michelle had been --- ey'd not spent enough time around her to know, and what time ey had managed had been mostly silence. Toward the end, her conversations were more interruptions than not, although the impression ey'd gotten was that she'd been kind, gentle, while still being the type to care passionately about things --- or, more often, people. The impression just hadn't been a strong one. Not enough time to for it to solidify.
 
 Ey'd long ago come to the conclusion, confirmed through discussions with several of the clade, that each of them was more a distillation of a singular aspect of Michelle than the whole of her. That wasn't to say that they weren't complete in their own right. What was it Codrin and Dear had said? Even True Name was a fully realized person.
 
+Normal, though? Could one be both a singular facet and normal?
+
+And maybe it goes beyond them. Maybe it's a dispersionista thing. E could see such a habit building even without Michelle's experiences.
+
 When the trail dipped down out of the trees toward the shore, ey stooped to pick up a handful of pebbles, enough to toss into the water once ey reached the boulder at the lake's outlet. Codrin had eir cairns, ey supposed, and ey had a heap of pebbles at the bottom of the lake, tossed in one by one over the decades.
 
 *I still don't know what I'm supposed to be doing,* ey thought, rattling the rocks around in eir hand as ey continued walking. *I don't know if I'm supposed to help either of them, bring them together again, or what.*
 
-It was still a week out from eir next meeting with True Name and while May's anxiety hadn't ticked back up, eir own had lingered. There was an unsettled feeling within em that made itself known whenever ey thought about heading to the coffee shop in a few days.
+It was still a week out from eir next meeting with True Name and while May's anxiety hadn't ticked back up, eir own had lingered. There was an unsettled feeling within em that made itself known whenever ey thought about heading to the coffee shop.
 
 "Maybe I'm not supposed to do anything," ey muttered, climbing up the boulder. "Maybe I'm just supposed to be a friend, like she says."
 
@@ -38,7 +42,7 @@ Ey tossed a stone into the water with a small plunk and splash. That gulf remain
 
 *Plunk, splash.*
 
-"I don't know why it feels like I'm supposed to be the one to do something about it."
+"I don't know why it feels like I'm supposed to be the one to do something about it. Friends are supposed to help, right?"
 
 *Plunk, splash.*
 
@@ -46,11 +50,11 @@ Ey tossed a stone into the water with a small plunk and splash. That gulf remain
 
 *Plunk, splash.*
 
-"And they'd probably both resent me if I *were* to do anything." Ey tossed a few pebbles in at once, a brief, watery static of splashing. "Whatever that'd even be."
+"And they'd probably both resent me if I *were* to do anything." Ey tossed a few pebbles in at once, splashing in a brief, watery static. "Whatever that'd even be."
 
 Ey stood at the peak of that boulder, tossing pebbles into water and thinking, mumbling to emself about May and True Name. When ey ran out of pebbles, ey sat cross-legged and looked out over the lake, unseeing.
 
-"I should just pinch myself whenever I start thinking that there's something I need to fix," ey said to the water. "Pretty sure May doesn't want it, she's happy working on her emotions without me meddling, and I'm pretty sure True Name doesn't want it, since she seems content...what was it, maintain that level of connection after so long a time of disconnect?"
+"I should just pinch myself whenever I start thinking that there's something I need to do," ey said to the water. "Pretty sure May doesn't want it, she's happy working on her emotions without me meddling, and I'm pretty sure True Name doesn't want it, since she seems content...what was it, maintaining that level of connection after so long a time of disconnect?"
 
 The lake didn't answer, not in anything other than water lapping at the shore and the chatter of the creek.
 
@@ -66,7 +70,7 @@ The walk back was spent unwinding the thought process that led em here in the fi
 
 "It always is," the skunk said, walking over from where she'd been poking around in the kitchen to dot her nose atop eir head. "It could be here too, you know."
 
-Ey laughed and waved a hand toward the door picture windows facing out the balcony, out to the drifting snow. "It's pretty, May. It makes being all warm in side nicer."
+Ey laughed and waved a hand toward the picture windows facing out the balcony, out to the drifting snow. "It's pretty, May. It makes being all warm inside nicer."
 
 She leaned down to rest her elbows on the back of the couch beside em. "I am not immune to the beauty, my dear. I am just a wuss when it comes to the cold."
 
@@ -86,7 +90,7 @@ She bounced on the balls of her feet and nodded. "Yes! You, my dear, know just h
 
 "Well, yes, but still." Still bouncing, she twirled around behind the couch, tail trailing along behind her. "I will get ready. I am hungry now, so too bad if you are not."
 
-One of the things that Ioan appreciated most about J2 over all of the other sushi places May had dragged em to is that it was the most amenable to em eating with eir hands. May was quite nimble with chopsticks --- no mean feat with paws, that --- but ey'd never quite picked it up, so being able to eat those little bullets of rice and fish with eir hands worked quite well.
+One of the things that Ioan appreciated most about J2 over all of the other sushi places May had dragged em to is that it was the most amenable to em eating with eir hands. May was quite nimble with chopsticks --- no mean feat with paws, that --- but ey'd never quite picked it up, so being able to eat those little bullets of rice and fish with eir hands suited em quite well.
 
 It also had a channel of water floating along between the booths, small dishes drifting by lazily for the diners to pluck from the water. It obviated the need for any staff, real or constructed, as each dish would be replaced from behind a bend in the river. With no need to pay beyond a token amount of reputation, it simply became a pleasant evening out, plates stacking up at the edge of their table, a tacit contest with other diners.
 
@@ -98,11 +102,11 @@ Ey shrugged, finished chewing, and said, "I guess. Was doing some thinking into
 
 "You have?"
 
-She laughed. "You are not a sneaky person, my dear. When it comes up, it is there for me to see."
+"You are not a sneaky person, my dear. When it comes up, it is there for me to see."
 
 "Oh, uh," ey stammered, setting eir plate to the side. "Sorry, May."
 
-"No, no, you are fine! I accept it in the spirit it is given. You want to do right by me and your friends, even when 'doing right' is not your responsibility. So long as you do not overstep boundaries, I can at least understand it."
+"No, no, you are fine! I accept it in the spirit in which it is given. You want to do right by me and your friends, even when 'doing right' is not your responsibility. So long as you do not overstep boundaries, I can at least understand it."
 
 "Well, all the same, it's not like it's comfortable, either way. I don't think anyone likes feeling helpless, but I just wish I didn't get hung up on finding solutions to everything."
 
@@ -118,7 +122,7 @@ She had taken the opportunity of em talking to eat the bit of shrimp she'd used
 
 Ey frowned.
 
-"Do not get me wrong, my dear, I am not suggesting one way or another. We have only known each other for a small portion of our lives. Just that Codrin and Sorina both decided to specifically focus on that."
+"Do not get me wrong, my dear, I am not suggesting one way or another. We have only known each other for a small portion of our lives. Just that Codrin and Sorina both decided to specifically focus on that only recently."
 
 Ey nodded thoughtfully. "Right. I don't know, honestly. Maybe? Maybe it's you, and--"
 
@@ -128,7 +132,7 @@ She rolled her eyes.
 
 The skunk paused in the act of picking another plate from the river, letting it drift on. "Did you feel that way about your brother? Was you uploading your fix?"
 
-Ey felt eir muscles go rigid, eir jaw clench, eir hands star to shake. "Uh...well, huh."
+Ey felt eir muscles go rigid, eir jaw clench, eir hands start to shake. "Uh...well, huh."
 
 Ears splayed and eyes wide with alarm, the skunk reached out to take one of eir hands in her own. "I am sorry, my dear. If I overstepped, I apologize."
 
@@ -136,15 +140,15 @@ Letting the skunk lace her fingers with eirs, ey shook eir head as though to dis
 
 She nodded, gave eir hand a gentle squeeze.
 
-"I think you're the only person I've really loved other than him," ey said, nudging the conversation back on track to avoid settling into rumination. "That's what I meant. I want to make things good for you, whether it's you overflowing, stuff with True Name, or any other number of things that aren't my responsibility or even under my control."
+"I think you're the only person I've really loved other than him," ey said, nudging the conversation back on track to avoid settling into that particular rumination. "That's what I meant. I want to make things good for you, whether it's you overflowing, stuff with True Name, or any other number of things that aren't my responsibility or even under my control."
 
 May smiled, the expression veering perilously close to a smirk. "You have said that you want to fix things for True Name at times, too, my dear. Are you sure you are not in love?"
 
-"Right, and I've also talked about how often I'll wind up getting caught off guard by how much you two still look and sound alike," ey said, smirking right back. "She's nice and I do want to help her, but I think I'm a ways off from that."
+"I've also talked about how often I'll wind up getting caught off guard by how much you two still look and sound alike," ey said, smirking right back. "She's nice and I do want to help her, but I think I'm a ways off from that."
 
 She laughed. "I know, I know. You just leave yourself so open, sometimes, a girl cannot help herself. You are also allowed to want to help friends and acquaintances as well as me."
 
-"Skunks, I swear..." He laughed when she pinched at eir fingers, tugging eir hand back so ey could grab another plate of yellowtail. "That's kind of what I was thinking about on the walk, though. I feel weirdly obligated to fix things. It's not my place to, I don't think either of you would be comfortable with that, and that's not even counting whether or not it's something either of you want."
+"Skunks, I swear..." He laughed when she pinched at eir fingers, tugging eir hand back so ey could grab another plate of yellowtail. "That's kind of what I was thinking about on the walk, though. I feel weirdly obligated to fix things. It's not my place to, I don't think either of you would be comfortable with that, and that's not even counting whether or not it's something either of you *want*."
 
 "I do not know," she said, shrugging. "I spoke about that with End Waking and Debarre recently, and am no closer to an answer. We did all agree, however, that you doing what you are is a good thing, in that it at least sets up an avenue for change, even if True Name or I do not decide to take that step."
 
@@ -168,6 +172,6 @@ Ey slouched back against the booth and watched the plates drift lazily by on the
 
 The skunk brushed her thumb over eir fingers, saying, "I understand, Ioan. It is complex. If it needs to change, it can, and until then, even if I still harbor equally complex thoughts on True Name, I appreciate your position in our dynamic."
 
-The conversation drifted away from the topic after that, and the two wound up back at home to poke through their own projects even as the night fell early.
+The conversation drifted away from the subject after that, and the two wound up back at home to poke through their own projects even as the night fell early.
 
-It wasn't until they'd made it back to bed and curled up together that ey was finally able to let go of the topic, though. Even throughout eir writing, a small portion of eir mind had been dedicated to the question of what eir role was between the two skunks and why it both rankled and felt necessary.
+It wasn't until they'd made it back to bed and curled up together that ey was finally able to truly let go of the topic, though. Even throughout eir writing, a small portion of eir mind had been dedicated to the question of what eir role was between the two skunks and why it both rankled and felt necessary.