update from sparkleup

writing/post-self/mitzvot/009.md

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-# Ioan Bălan --- 2350
+ Ioan Bălan --- 2350
 
 True Name, having gathered her wits about her at least enough to trudge out of the lake and fork herself dry, requested directions to somewhere she could think alone. Ioan gestured down the path toward the rock, explaining that it'd be far enough away that they wouldn't hear each other if she didn't want a cone of silence, but that she'd still be able to see them at the entry point if anything happened.
 
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 Ey took a long breath, scrubbed eir hands over eir face, and paced in an abbreviated line before her. "I know, May, I don't blame you. I'm completely baffled. Go ahead."
 
-"I spend two hundred fucking years trying to get away from that life, from all of her fucking schemes," she said, voice quickly rising in volume. "And then I spend the last three trying to calm down so that I quit burning up whenever I so much as think about her, and now this. Look at us! Hiding in the woods from assassins. *Assassins!*"
+"I spend two hundred fucking years trying to get away from that life, from all of her fucking schemes, from what she did to Michelle," she said, voice quickly rising in volume. "And then I spend the last three trying to calm down so that I quit burning up whenever I so much as think about her, and now this. Look at us! Hiding in the woods from assassins. *Assassins!*"
 
 Ey averted eir gaze from her. Nothing ey could say would help, and ey knew some remote part of emself was feeling much of what she was, too.
 
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 "Sorry, May," ey said, trying to stand still. "It's just a little nuts."
 
-The skunk sighed, held out her paw to em, and gave her best smile. "I know, my dear. I am really fucking confused and really fucking pissed, I do not imagine you are feeling much better. Would walking help?"
+The skunk sighed, held out her paw to em, and gave her best smile. "I know. I am really fucking confused and really fucking pissed, I do not imagine you are feeling much better. Would walking help?"
 
-Ey took her paw in his hand and nodded. "Please."
+Ey took her paw in eir hand and nodded. "Please."
 
 Remembering their promise to stay in sight, they walked slowly back and forth along the short stretch of beach near the entry point, still within sight of True Name, kneeling on the rock by the outlet of the lake.
 
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 "You're fine, May, you just had some guy chasing you around our house trying to kill you or whatever, you're allowed to be pissed."
 
-She snorted and shook her head. "He had only just arrived a few moments before you. I imagine True Name's fork said something about being with you but not where, so they came to our place and saw someone that looked vaguely like her. Perhaps they wanted it to be as close to simultaneous as possible for precisely this reason and one simply jumped the gun. I am surprised they did not just wait for her. How eager they must be."
+She snorted and shook her head. "He had only just arrived a few moments before you. I imagine True Name's fork said something about being with you but not where, so he came to our place and saw someone that looked vaguely like her. Perhaps they wanted it to be as close to simultaneous as possible for precisely this reason and one simply jumped the gun. I am surprised they did not just wait for her. How eager they must be."
 
 "Makes about as much sense as any of this." Ey looked out across the lake at where the other skunk sat, head bowed. "What do we do now?"