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misc/maddy.md

@@ -22,6 +22,7 @@ In order to draw away from what she sees as the less-appealing aspects of her ap
 
 She's followed everywhere by the biggest endowment any snow leopard could hope for: a luxurious tail that seems just a bit too long on her. The tip is black with a few rings, but the rest is covered in those dark spots on a light grey.
 
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@@ -31,7 +32,8 @@ She's got more than enough fluff to keep her warm, after all. The thick gray fur
 
 In order to draw away from what she sees as the less-appealing aspects of her appearance, Maddy's taken steps to flash up the bits of her that she likes more. She's dyed her hair in pastel colors, a smooth fade from pale pink to sky blue, complementing her light blue eyes. The hair is worn up in a pony tail most of the time, though bangs continue to pester her throughout the day. The rest of her face is fairly plain, though certainly not lacking in expressiveness. When she's not blushing and stammering about something that makes her shy and embarrassed (that abiding love of Enya, perhaps), she's most likely to be animatedly geeking out about something she cares deeply about, such as Star Wars novels, or perhaps Firefly. Her nose is pink with a few darker splotches on it, fronting a fairly standard set of whiskers and well-groomed cheekfur.
 
-She's followed everywhere by the biggest endowment any snow leopard could hope for: a luxurious tail that seems just a bit too long on her. The tip is black with a few rings, but the rest is covered in those dark spots on a light grey.
+She's followed everywhere by the biggest endowment any snow leopard could hope for: a luxurious tail that seems just a bit too long on her. The tip is black with a few rings, but the rest is covered in those dark spots on a light grey
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writing/post-self/toledot/launch/phys/Douglas/006.md

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 > **May Then My Name:** Do you think that you will?
 > 
-> **Douglas:** I don't know. Maybe? Probably. Once I'm out of a job, my reason to be here is kind of gone, and I imagine whatever good will I've built up will start to run out and they won't let me stay on the station. It's mostly self sufficient, but resources are limited and I'm sure there's someone who would like to take my spot.
+> **Douglas:** I don't know. Maybe? Probably. Once I'm out of a job, my reason to be here is kind of gone, and I imagine whatever goodwill I've built up will start to run out and they won't let me stay on the station. It's mostly self-sufficient, but resources are limited and I'm sure there's someone who would like to take my spot.
 > 
 > **Ioan Bălan:** And you mentioned not wanting to go back planet-side.
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writing/post-self/toledot/secession/sys/True-Name/003.md

@@ -30,7 +30,7 @@ She picked at a coin that had cemented itself to the rim of the fountain in a la
 
 There was a part of her mind that was tempted to consider those who lived sys-side as some how more perfect beings than those who remained phys-side. But no, that wasn't quite correct. They were different, yes, but they weren't some greater form of perfection --- or perhaps not entirely.
 
-Were they perhaps some core difference in ideals? Obviously, given the cost of uploading, there was a natural barrier, but even among the upper-middle and higher classes, there were some who simply chose not to upload. What was the difference? Was it aspirational? Were those who uploaded on some different wavelength from those who stayed behind? There were certainly many who found the whole process abhorrent on a physical level, yes. Of those who found it distasteful on intellectual, emotional, and spiritual levels, what did the prospect of continuing to live phys-side provide that living sys-side did not?
+Were there perhaps some core difference in ideals? Obviously, given the cost of uploading, there was a natural barrier, but even among the upper-middle and higher classes, there were some who simply chose not to upload. What was the difference? Was it aspirational? Were those who uploaded on some different wavelength from those who stayed behind? There were certainly many who found the whole process abhorrent on a physical level, yes. Of those who found it distasteful on intellectual, emotional, and spiritual levels, what did the prospect of continuing to live phys-side provide that living sys-side did not?
 
 She couldn't decide, but there was the logical fallout of that situation, that the two should be treated on a fundamentally different level, when it came to politics.
 
@@ -56,7 +56,7 @@ He shrugged.
 
 "Jonas Prime, today."
 
-True Name nodded a greeting and focused on her hummus for a few moments.
+True Name nodded a greeting and focused on her hummus for a few minutes.
 
 Once it was clear that she had reached a pause, Jonas spoke up. "Tell me about your thoughts and plans. I'm curious what it is that required alcohol to understand."
 
@@ -150,7 +150,7 @@ Not the best tactic for someone who taught theatre to teenagers.
 
 "Will you tell me some of those plans?"
 
-She smiled. "Why not, we are working together, after all. They can use our background in theatre to work the propaganda angle."
+She smiled. "Why not? We are working together, after all. They can use our background in theatre to work the propaganda angle."
 
 It was only a portion of the truth, but she also suspected that Jonas knew this. He accepted it easily enough.