diff --git a/writing/post-self/toledot/launch/launch/Codrin-pollux/002.md b/writing/post-self/toledot/launch/launch/Codrin-pollux/002.md
index 66b625ec..6f30cc7e 100644
--- a/writing/post-self/toledot/launch/launch/Codrin-pollux/002.md
+++ b/writing/post-self/toledot/launch/launch/Codrin-pollux/002.md
@@ -18,7 +18,7 @@ Codrin bent down to pluck a thin stem of grass as they walked, fiddling with it
 
 *"It still scared you?"* Dear hazarded.
 
-"I think so, yeah. I can understand the anxiety that one might not be missed after one leaves a place. Even in the face of knowledge that that's not true --- Ioan will miss you, May Then My Name will miss you, just about everyone who showed up at the death day party will, as well --- it's hard to really internalize that others will still be thinking of you when you aren't there."
+"I think so, yeah. I can understand the anxiety that one might not be missed after one leaves a place. Even in the face of knowledge that that's not true --- Ioan will miss you, May Then My Name will miss you, just about everyone who showed up at the death day party will, too --- it's hard to really internalize that others will still be thinking of you when you aren't there."
 
 The fox frowned, but nodded to Codrin all the same.
 
@@ -50,17 +50,17 @@ Dear grinned. It looked tired. *"That we did, yes. I will say that this is not t
 
 Codrin disentangled eir hands from the foxes paws, opting instead to hug it around the middle. Dear reciprocated by looping its arms around eir shoulders.
 
-"That's sort of what I wound up suspecting you meant, yeah. I just didn't pick up on it at the time is all."
+"That's what I suspected you meant, yeah. I just didn't pick up on it at the time is all."
 
 *"Yes. Sorry, Codrin."*
 
 "It's okay, promise."
 
-They stood for a while, there in the prairie, each thinking their thoughts, until by some unspoken signal, they turned the side, of the cairn that hadn't been explored and began walking.
+They stood for a while, there in the prairie, silent, thinking, until by some unspoken signal, they turned the side, of the cairn that hadn't been explored and began walking.
 
 *"What's next on your list?"*
 
-"Mm? In terms of interviews and such?"
+"Hm? In terms of interviews and such?"
 
 *"Yes. Do you know where you will start looking?"*
 
@@ -70,7 +70,7 @@ They stood for a while, there in the prairie, each thinking their thoughts, unti
 
 Codrin laughed, shrugged, and knelt down to begin building the next pile of stones. "You got any better ideas, fox?"
 
-It knelt beside them, digging up stones of its own and handing them to em. *"Of course I do. Do ask our friends, as I think they will have much to say, but also, while poking around, I saw that several of the founders have made the launch. I suppose that I am not surprised that this is the case.."*
+It knelt beside them, digging up stones of its own and handing them to em. *"Of course I do. Do ask our friends, as I think they will have much to say, but also, while poking around, I saw that several of the founders have made the launch. I am not surprised that this is the case.."*
 
 "Oh? That makes sense, I suppose" Ey plopped a root-tangled rock on top of the growing pile, laughing. "Something exciting after all those years, back to being at the heart of something important"