From 3a203eea759b3a445c77a6878a79428ba1bb5b17 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Madison Scott-Clary Date: Thu, 19 Aug 2021 18:50:05 -0700 Subject: [PATCH] update from sparkleup --- writing/post-self/toledot/launch/sys/001.md | 8 ++++---- 1 file changed, 4 insertions(+), 4 deletions(-) diff --git a/writing/post-self/toledot/launch/sys/001.md b/writing/post-self/toledot/launch/sys/001.md index 68c3bb6a..04a62b9d 100644 --- a/writing/post-self/toledot/launch/sys/001.md +++ b/writing/post-self/toledot/launch/sys/001.md @@ -94,7 +94,7 @@ It was rare for the fox to leave the end of a sentence unsaid, but Ioan could no While every guest was noteworthy in their own way, a few names stood out to em. Dear's sibling instance, Serene; Sustained And Sustaining, arrived, a mad grin on her face as she ran directly at Dear and tackled it, the two foxes wrestling briefly on the ground before standing up and dusting themselves off again, both laughing. -"I can't believe you're going to destroy this place, you asshole. I spent days on the grass alone!" +"I can't believe you're going to destroy this place, you asshole. I spent weeks on the grass alone!" Dear grinned lopsidedly. *"It is not yours anymore, however, and I am a sucker for grand gestures."* @@ -130,15 +130,15 @@ Something about their posture forbid everyone else from joining in just yet. > Should old acquaintance be forgot > and auld lang syne? -Ioan realized that ey was crying, that many in the circle were crying, and without any signal, the party as a whole burst into the chorus. +Ioan realized that ey was crying, that many in the circle were crying, and without any signal, all within the circle burst into the chorus. > For auld lang syne, my dear, > for auld lang syne. > We'll take a cup of kindness yet, > For auld lang-- -Before the final note of the song could be sang, Dear gave a jaunty salute, bowed with a flourish, and quit along with its partner and Codrin Bălan. The landscape around them crumbled into voxels, and those voxels joined together by powers of two, and with a soft chime, all the members of the party were shunted off to wherever they called home. +Before the final note of the song could be sung, Dear gave a jaunty salute, bowed with a flourish, and quit along with its partner and Codrin Bălan. The landscape around them crumbled into voxels, and those voxels joined together by powers of two, and with a soft chime, all the members of the party were shunted off to wherever they called home. -Ioan stumbled and fell to eir knees on the parquet of eir entryway, May Then My Name standing, defiant against the change, beside em. +Ioan stumbled and fell to eir knees on the parquet of eir entryway, May Then My Name standing, defiant against the change in scenery, in air and light and gravity, beside em. "What an asshole," she laughed.