diff --git a/writing/post-self/toledot/launch/launch/Codrin-pollux/002.md b/writing/post-self/toledot/launch/launch/Codrin-pollux/002.md
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--- a/writing/post-self/toledot/launch/launch/Codrin-pollux/002.md
+++ b/writing/post-self/toledot/launch/launch/Codrin-pollux/002.md
@@ -30,7 +30,7 @@ It squeezed eir hand in its paw, but remained silent.
 
 Dear stopped suddenly, there by a cairn, leaving Codrin to keep walking until its paw tugged em to a stop in turn.
 
-*"Michelle made a difficult decision, but the right one,"* it said. *"I remember that pain, the inability to be just one thing, to be an entire person. I remember how those waves of instability always came with the urge to vomit. She made the right decision to choose her own end."*
+*"Michelle made a difficult decision, but the right one,"* it said. *"I remember that pain, the inability to be just one thing, to be an entire person. I remember how those waves of instability always made her --- made me --- so nauseous. She made the right decision to choose her own end."*
 
 "And the decision to not fix the split-mindedness?"
 
@@ -38,11 +38,11 @@ It frowned down to the ground. *"I do not know if that was the right decision."*
 
 Codrin turned to face the fox, taking its other paw in eir free hand. "Do you know why she made it, at least?"
 
-*"Yes. I think so. At least, I know why she made the decision two centuries ago. She felt that she was honoring the Name, that to get rid of that part of her that left her in that state after getting lost was to disrespect the referent of that name and all that they went through."*
+*"Yes. I think so. At least, I know why she made the decision two centuries ago. She felt that she was honoring the Name, that to get rid of that part of her that left her in that state after getting lost was to disrespect the referent of that name and all that they went through. She thought that, after seeing how her first forks were locked into singular aspects, she would lose that."*
 
 Dear looked off into the prairie, so Codrin took the opportunity to lean forward and kiss it's cheek. "It was difficult seeing her and then learning of her death, and given the associations that you have with her, I couldn't help but think that there might be some of that in you when you said you wanted to die."
 
-*"I know, and I apologize for that. It did not adequately express what that means to me, but was too quippy to turn down. I will be more careful with how I phrase these topics in the future."*
+*"I know, and I apologize for that. It did not adequately express what that means to me, but was too sharp a phrase to turn down. I will be more careful with how I phrase these topics in the future."*
 
 "Thank you, Dear. I've been giving it some thought, and I think I understand what you're going for. I think we even talked about it after Qoheleth's meeting. You wanted to find a way to...end, I think you put it."