diff --git a/writing/post-self/toledot/secession/phys/Yared/006.md b/writing/post-self/toledot/secession/phys/Yared/006.md
index e7c0a77c..d9fe64f6 100644
--- a/writing/post-self/toledot/secession/phys/Yared/006.md
+++ b/writing/post-self/toledot/secession/phys/Yared/006.md
@@ -56,7 +56,7 @@ Yared wiped his palms against his thighs, shaking his head. "He guessed, council
 
 All he could think to do was nod.
 
-"Well, if Jonas knows what we're up to, that does change things somewhat. I know that our latest suggestion was that you mention independence for the first time. I'd like to modify that somewhat, if you haven't already written your post."
+"Well, if Jonas Anderson has figured out what we're up to, that does change things somewhat. I know that our latest suggestion was that you mention independence for the first time. I'd like to modify that somewhat, if you haven't already written your post."
 
 "Not yet. I was going to do it this morning before our usual meeting."
 
@@ -64,7 +64,7 @@ All he could think to do was nod.
 
 "Of course, sir."
 
-Nodding, the councilor said, "Thank you, Yared. I'm glad to see that we are more on the same page, now. Stay wary of Jonas, maintain your friendship, and keep me up to date about the things that he says that don't make it into your posts. As long as our goals align, we should be able to work together through you."
+Nodding, the councilor said, "Thank you, Yared. I'm glad to see that we are more on the same page, now. Stay wary of Jonas Anderson, maintain your friendship, and keep me up to date about the things that he says that don't make it into your posts. As long as our goals align, we should be able to work together through you."
 
 "You won't talk to him?" Yared asked.
 
diff --git a/writing/post-self/toledot/secession/phys/Yared/007.md b/writing/post-self/toledot/secession/phys/Yared/007.md
index f56d1b45..5b4cb5ca 100644
--- a/writing/post-self/toledot/secession/phys/Yared/007.md
+++ b/writing/post-self/toledot/secession/phys/Yared/007.md
@@ -7,7 +7,7 @@
 > 1. Those who have uploaded to live on the System shall no longer hold their citizenship (sometimes known as "dual citizenship") to their country of origin.
 > 2. The creations of those who have uploaded to live on the System shall be considered as originating in and governed by the System as a political entity.
 > 3. The System as a self-governing entity shall enter into trade agreements with other governmental entities for goods and services required to maintain the System as a physical entity.
-> 4. The exchange of goods and services between the System and the governmental entity named in the trade agreement shall be binding by those two parties only.
+> 4. The exchange of goods and services between the System and the governmental entity named in the trade agreement shall be binding for those two parties only.
 > 5. The act of uploading to the System shall be considered one of emigration, and regulations around immigration shall be set by the System.
 > 6. No extant governmental entity may set undue barriers to emigration to the System beyond existing expatriation agreements, nor may they intimidate, dissuade, or otherwise hinder citizens from choosing to emigrate.
 > 7. As a separate governmental entity, the System is a valid destination for asylum-seekers and refugees regardless of reasons for seeking such, with regulations for accepting such being set by the System as a self-governing entity.
@@ -17,18 +17,18 @@
 >     3. It shall not provide favor to any one governmental entity over another except through the agreements set above.
 >     4. No other governmental entity shall declare war on or attempt to destroy the System.
 >     5. No other governmental entity shall aid or abet another governmental entity to conspire against the System.
-> 9. The physical elements of the System including but not limited to the System hardware, resource infrastructure, and the "Ansible system" required for uploading shall be considered property of the System as a governmental entity.
-> 10. The System of a governmental entity shall enact any and all regulations relating to its own governance, which no other governmental entity may hinder.
+> 9. The physical elements of the System including but not limited to the System hardware, resource infrastructure, and the "Ansible system" required for uploading shall be considered property of the System as a governmental entity, with the offices containing the "Ansible" system being considered an international zone.
+> 10. The System as a governmental entity shall enact any and all regulations relating to its own governance, which no other governmental entity may hinder.
 >
-> *Signatories:*
+> *Sponsors:*
 >
-> Direct Democracy Representative individual
+> Direct Democracy Representative signatory
 > :   Yared Zerezghi (NEAC) via Direct Democracy Representative.
 >
-> Governmental representative
+> Supervisory government signatory
 > :   Yosef Demma (NEAC), Councilor.
 >
-> System-side representatives
+> System-side signatories
 > :   The Only Time I Know My True Name Is When I Dream of the Ode clade by way of Michelle Hadje, Jonas Prime of the Jonas clade by way of Jonas Anderson (Council of Eight), Council-members.
 >
 > November 28, 2124