From 4e575f4c2f4aa9b25d9604c16872f724db225db6 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Madison Scott-Clary Date: Tue, 7 Jun 2022 22:15:12 -0700 Subject: [PATCH] update from sparkleup --- writing/post-self/mitzvot/030.md | 8 +++----- 1 file changed, 3 insertions(+), 5 deletions(-) diff --git a/writing/post-self/mitzvot/030.md b/writing/post-self/mitzvot/030.md index 64bc1e7b..e35bf351 100644 --- a/writing/post-self/mitzvot/030.md +++ b/writing/post-self/mitzvot/030.md @@ -60,7 +60,7 @@ Ey shrugged helplessly, gathered up the loose lounge pants and shirt to go chang *"I have no clue how tired I even am,"* ey subvocalized once ey returned. *"Or if I'll even be able to sleep here."* -*"If you need to sneak off to sleep in a real bed, you can, my dear."* +*"If you need to sneak off to sleep in a real bed, you can."* *"I'm* also *unwilling to sleep without you, so..."* @@ -108,7 +108,7 @@ True Name nodded and settled down into her nest of pillows. May and Ioan stayed up a little longer, chatting through sensorium messages to let True Name process in peace. Cognizant of her mention that she felt better when not thinking about boundaries, ey kept the topics light, asking about favorite things and letting her rant about plays from her past that she'd hated. -The only interruption from the other skunk came nearly an hour later. She yelped and sat up, scrambling back against the wall away from them. "You know!" she shouted. "Codrin knows!" +Nearly an hour later, True Name yelped and sat up, scrambling back against the wall away from them. "You know!" she shouted. "Codrin knows!" It took only a moment for the truth to click into place. Both ey and May sat up to give her a bit more space. @@ -146,7 +146,7 @@ Finally, shoulders sagging, she handed it back. "Re-secure it and destroy it, pl Ey did so and held up eir hands. "I'm sorry, True--" -She patted at eir arm with a shaking paw. "Please do not apologize." After dropping the cone of silence, she continued, "I should have...I should have learned from...I am sorry." +She patted eir arm with a shaking paw. "Please do not apologize." After dropping the cone of silence, she continued, "I should have...I should have learned from...I am sorry." May held out a paw once more, and this time True Name took it, letting herself be guided back to the nest of pillows, where she slumped down once more, expression glassy. "Too much," she mumbled. @@ -156,8 +156,6 @@ After a moment's silence, she shook her head. "No, I will...be fine. We will spe May nodded and crawled back over to where Ioan, nudging em to lay down so that she could tuck in against eir front. She remained tense, and when ey sent a gentle sensorium ping, she simply shook her head. -Etc. Then later, before she goes to make coffee: - Tiredness eventually won them over, though, and, despite the room being mirrored from what ey was used to, the bed was the same, comfortable one ey'd slept in for the last century, the house held the same sense of 'home' as ever. May curled against eir front as she always did, and while it was strange seeing True Name just beyond her, it was still where ey belonged. The last thing ey remembered before falling asleep was watching the way True Name had curled to face May, the two skunks holding each others' paws, and thinking to emself, *This isn't how I pictured things winding up if I was to somehow fix them, but it could certainly be worse.*