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writing/post-self/neviim/ioan/001.md

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 # Ioan Bălan --- 2346
 
-"I never wanted this. I never wanted any of this!" the woman shouted, stamping her foot and jabbing her finger toward em. "You talk about how much I mean to you, how much this place means, and then what? Nothing ever comes of it."
+"I never wanted this. I never wanted any of this!" the skunk shouted, stamping her foot and jabbing her finger toward em. "You talk about how much I mean to you, how much this place means, and then what? Nothing ever comes of it."
 
-"What the hell *is* supposed to come of it?" Ey stood quickly enough to knock the chair back onto the ground, all but lunging toward her. She stood half a head shorter than em, but, having decided that this wasn't menacing enough, ey forked two times in quick succession, three of em stomping toward her.
+"What the hell *is* supposed to come of it?" Ey stood quickly enough to knock the chair back onto the ground, all but lunging toward her. She stood easily a head shorter than em, but, having decided that this wasn't menacing enough, ey forked two times in quick succession, three of em stomping toward her.
 
-Rather than quail under the onslaught or simply run away, she stood up straighter, arms crossed, her round face proud and defiant, framed by curls. "Really? Are you really sure that you need this to make your point?"
+Rather than quail under the onslaught or simply run away, she stood up straighter, arms crossed, her round face proud and defiant. "Really? Are you really sure that you need this to make your point?"
 
 Ey --- all three of em --- faltered in eir advance as the skunk continued.
 
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 "Hi May." Ey grinned, tilting eir head enough to get at least a sidelong glance at her. "Well done on that 'ever'. Thought you were going to punch me in the stomach or something."
 
-She nipped at eir shoulder, letting em feel sharp teeth even through the thick fabric of the costume, before standing up. "That would be out of character, dear. Both for my character and I. Might be kinda fun sometime, though."
+She nipped at eir shoulder, letting em feel sharp teeth even through the thick fabric of the costume, before standing up. "That would be out of character, my dear. Both for my character and I. Might be kinda fun sometime, though."
 
 After Ioan stood, they made their way backstage, letting the hands --- several of whom were also them --- deal with the scene change. Backstage, then back behind even that to their dressing room, where they were each able to get straightened up in front of the floor-to-ceiling mirror.
 
-As ey always did when coming face to face with emself in costume, the feeling of being someone else all but disappeared, and ey marveled at the fact that ey'd even let May talk em into this however many years ago. If there was one thing that ey was, it was a historian, right? It was a writer. An investigative journalist. Ey was in no way a stage actor, right?
+As ey always did when coming face to face with emself in costume, the feeling of being someone else all but disappeared, and ey marveled at the fact that ey'd even let May talk em into this however many years ago. If there was one thing that ey was, it was a historian, right? It was a writer. An investigative journalist, right? Ey was in no way a stage actor, right?
 
 But the Ioan that stared back at em, one skinny almost to the point of gaunt, one with sallow skin and sunken eyes, was proof of the opposite. It had taken em at least a year to really, truly master the art of forking over and over to carefully modify one's appearance. It felt counter to so many instincts, and even still, ey left a Ioan back home, unchanged from the view of emself that felt most at home, just to ensure that there remained some tie to that. May had chided em for this, but ey couldn't let go entirely.
 
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 Ey laughed and reached up to tug at one of her ears. "Well now's your--"
 
+Ey froze.
+
 The longer ey held still like that, the deeper May's frown grew, the more her tail twitched this way and that in agitation. Still, she let the silence be and didn't touch em, unwilling to interrupt what must be a rather long sensorium message.
 
 Finally, ey sagged, rubbing eir hands against eir face. "Uh, sorry. Can you send a fork back home? I'm going to have to try and push that out of mind for the time being, and I don't want both of us to be in that state."
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 "I'm still trying to process that."
 
-"Do you not feel the same?" She reached out a paw to take one of eir hands in her own. "You got into theatre after all, did you not? You are not doing much in the way of history, these days, other than the occasional paper. Did you really feel as though you had been sucked into all those projects with no input?"
+"Do you not feel the same?" She reached out a paw to take one of eir hands in her own. "You got into theatre after all, did you not? You are not doing much in the way of history these days, other than the occasional paper. Did you really feel as though you had been sucked into all those projects with no input?"
 
 Ey let her lace her fingers with ears as ey thought. Words were a long time coming. "A little, I suppose, but this bit about feeling a lack of agency is new to me. I don't know that I ever felt that strongly about being dragged along or anything."
 
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 "How do you mean?"
 
-She squeezed eir fingers between her own. "I think Codrin and Dear settled into a life of their own, but you know Dear. It is intensely focused on these big dramatic gestures. And before you say it, I am focused on drama, but rarely are my actions in life dramatic. I am happy with the life we have built. I am happy living with you and loving you and pushing you into writing increasingly weird plays."
+She squeezed eir fingers between her own. "I think Codrin and Dear settled into a life of their own on Castor, but you know Dear. It is intensely focused on these big dramatic gestures. And before you say it, I am focused on drama, but rarely are my actions in life dramatic. I am happy with the life we have built. I am happy living with you and loving you and pushing you into writing increasingly weird plays."
 
 Ey laughed, lifting her paw to kiss at her knuckles. "Well, sure. You got me to settle down, I guess. I don't think Dear is capable of settling down, but its patterns are familiar. It will do as it does and drag others with it."
 
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 Ey nodded. "I'll do that, yeah. Any suggestions?"
 
-"Perhaps ey could do a grand gesture and surprise Dear. I have loved it every time that you have surprised me. I do not think that Codrin has learned how to do that yet."
+"Perhaps ey could do a grand gesture and surprise Dear. I have loved it every time that you have surprised me. I do not think that Codrin#Castor has learned how to do that yet."
 
 "I'm not sure I know how to teach someone how to do grand gestures."
 
-She tugged at eir fingers. "You have become a playwright and performer, my dear, do not sell yourself short. Besides, to hear Dear tell it, ey is not incapable. The name thing, the surprise dinner a few years back, the forking stuff for its gallery show. Ey is just shy, perhaps."
+She tugged at eir fingers. "You have become a playwright and performer, my dear, do not sell yourself short. Besides, to hear Dear tell it, ey is not incapable. The name thing, of course. The surprise dinner a few years back. The forking stuff for its gallery show. Ey is just shy, perhaps."
 
 "It's a Bălan thing," ey said.