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writing/post-self/marsh/011.md

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 The next two  days passed in relative peace.
 
-There were a few more meetings with phys-side, usually with just Günay, but sometimes Jakub or another administrator peeked in. They all seemed to be rather cowed by the sys-side administration, such as it was. I chalked this up — later confirmed by Dry Grass — that there had been other talks beside between the latent Temporary Administrative Council and the System Consortium, which had been rather tense.
+There were a few more meetings with phys-side, usually with just Günay, but sometimes Jakub or another administrator peeked in. They all seemed to be rather cowed by the sys-side administration, such as it was. I chalked this up to the fact — later confirmed by Dry Grass — that there had been other talks beside between the latent Temporary Administrative Council and the System Consortium. Talks which had been far more tense.
 
-Although phys-side remained in control of several aspects, they had quickly ceded many of these to us once more. This included ungating all communication between Lagrange and both of the LVs, leading to a flood of messages from friends and long-diverged cocladists. Reed#Castor sent me several panicked messages, as had the rest of the clade.
+Although phys-side remained in control of a few aspects, they had quickly ceded the rest to us once more. 
 
-This included Marsh, both on Castor and Pollux.
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+This included ungating all communication between Lagrange and both of the LVs, leading to a flood of messages from friends and long-diverged cocladists. Reed#Castor had sent me several panicked messages, as had the rest of the clade.
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+This notably included Marsh, both on Castor and Pollux.
 
 There followed a rather tense meeting with all of the Marshans remaining on Lagrange, as well as Vos and Pierre. Confronted with the fact that two versions of Marsh lived on, inaccessible, we all fell into a tailspin, each in our own way.
 
 Pierre and Vos were left in tears, quite understandably. The force with which the simple message hit them doubtless left a reminder that their shared partner was now gone, and yet still existed beyond reach.
 
-Lily remained stoic and Rush silent, while Tule, Sedge, and I had similar reactions. We were confused. We were unable to handle our emotions, much less put a finger on them. How could we? We were unmoored, here on Lagrange, and yet it was a plain fact that such was not the case some four light-months away. We could message them, we could send them a summary of how we felt, but what good would that do? What would it gain us to send tearful messages to them when we wouldn't hear back for more than eight months?
+Lily remained stoic, Cress sobbed, and Rush stayed silent, while Tule, Sedge, and I all had similar reactions. We were confused. We were unable to handle our emotions, much less put a finger on them. How could we? We were unmoored, here on Lagrange, and yet it was a plain fact that such was not the case some four light-months away. We could message them, we could send them a summary of how we felt, but what good would that do? What would it gain us to send tearful messages to them when we wouldn't hear back for more than eight months?
 
 The three of us agreed that we'd hold off until we knew more, both about the situation and our reactions.
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 None of us knew anyone phys-side. We didn't have the luxury of communications separated by just over two seconds. We didn't have AVEC to help us out at all. All of our friends had either uploaded or died without having done so, and none of our family cared enough to talk to their grandson with however many 'greats' preceded that relationship.
 

writing/post-self/marsh/index.md

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     * [O] [006](006) --- Dinner with Reed, Hanne, friends (Warmth, My, Jess, Dry Grass), the Marshans, Lily sort of reconciles with Dry Grass, conversation 1 about what it means to be a clade without a root instance. --- 4379
 * [o] Part 2 --- Phys-side is being a little sketchy about what happened, turns out there was a reset and a lot of work behind the scenes after a coordinated attack between phys- and sys-side, taking the form of a generalized weapon that wiped out most of the System. Large chunks of it were restored after a lot of work and help from the Artemisians, but not total success --- virus loophole was fixed (incl singular attacks), but no guarantee there won't be another work-around, plans to split the System into smaller pieces, move some of them to Earth/Sun Lagrange points
     * [O] [007](007) --- Dry Grass loops Reed & co into discussion with phys-side admin and engineers, Günay made point and admin pushed to the side, Huddle to talk about why they're being so cagey --- 5747
-    * [o] [008](008) --- Dinner and talking with Dry Grass, Cress, and Tule about feelings, Reed catching feelings --- 3324
+    * [O] [008](008) --- Dinner and talking with Dry Grass, Cress, and Tule about feelings, Reed catching feelings --- 3324
     * [ ] INTERLUDE: Millwright
     * [-] 009 --- (MERGED DOWN)
-    * [o] [010](010) --- Clade representatives form a group, contact chill phys-side systech, learning even more about both what happened WRT CPV bomb and collectives, plus how phys-side is seeing things, various changes to the System, AWNH and Jonas Fa are into knife play --- 5877
+    * [O] [010](010) --- Clade representatives form a group, contact chill phys-side systech, learning even more about both what happened WRT CPV bomb and collectives, plus how phys-side is seeing things, various changes to the System, AWNH and Jonas Fa are into knife play --- 5877
     * [o] [011](011) --- Meeting with member of The System Consortium, who is a member of a conservative collective, learning more about why the System was bombed --- 2346
     * [o] [012](012) --- Visiting the morgue, funeral for Marsh, fight with Lily, who is reacting to grief with anger. --- 3345
 * [o] Part 3 --- The ramifications, both global and personal (but mostly personal) --- a lot of talk among the Marshans, their partners, and a chill phys-side systech --- looking into trying to reconstruct Marsh by cross-tree merging Reed, Lily, and Cress --- it doesn't work, so it turns into coming to terms with letting go of the past
@@ -60,6 +60,7 @@ NB: It's frankly astonishing how few cats there are in this story. Fix that.
         * Rush: darker skin from a tan, like if Reed got super into gardening
     * Lily: taller than pre-transition Marsh, a little frumpy, strawberry blond, never wears makeup, freckly with coarser skin
     * Cress: smaller than Dry Grass, expressive features, bit softer, very androgynous, fashion forward
+* Consider moving 006 (dinner at home) to after 007 (first meeting with phys-side) and 008 (hotpot) to after 010 (second meeting with phys-side), 006 becomes time with Hanne instead to build her up more.
 
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