diff --git a/writing/post-self/toledot/launch/launch/Codrin-castor/004.md b/writing/post-self/toledot/launch/launch/Codrin-castor/004.md
index e5ff5fe0..0c28da62 100644
--- a/writing/post-self/toledot/launch/launch/Codrin-castor/004.md
+++ b/writing/post-self/toledot/launch/launch/Codrin-castor/004.md
@@ -8,7 +8,7 @@ As an example, there was this seemingly universal agreement among the Odists tha
 
 Why was it, for instance, that Codrin#Pollux had decided to simply interview Dear, where ey had not? And what was ey, Codrin#Castor, to do with the information that Dear had shared with eir cocladist? Hell, was cocladist even the right word, at this point? That seemed to imply a down-tree instance that one could still access.
 
-*I want to die,* the fox had said. How had Codrin#Pollux even begun to deal with that bit of information? When ey read those words, in eir comfortable font on eir fine paper in eir nice books, ey had cried. Ey had cried much as it sounded Codrin#Pollux had.
+*I want to die,* the fox had said. How had Codrin#Pollux even begun to deal with that bit of information? When ey read those words, in eir comfortable font on eir fine paper in eir nice books, ey had cried. Ey had cried much as it sounded like Codrin#Pollux had.
 
 Ey had cried and closed the book and paced eir way out into the prairie outside the house, where ey had cried some more. Ey had not walked any new paths that day, simply walked to the outermost cairn that ey could find, sat down next to it, and watered the thirsty grass with a grief ey could not name.
 
diff --git a/writing/post-self/toledot/secession/phys/Yared/005.md b/writing/post-self/toledot/secession/phys/Yared/005.md
index ff99d806..3d24e68e 100644
--- a/writing/post-self/toledot/secession/phys/Yared/005.md
+++ b/writing/post-self/toledot/secession/phys/Yared/005.md
@@ -92,7 +92,7 @@
 > 
 > **True Name:** Those are all good potential reasons, yes. Do you have any hints as to which may be the most likely?
 > 
-> **Yared:** Not particularly. He's mentioned them all in passing
+> **Yared:** Not particularly. He's mentioned them all in passing.
 > 
 > **True Name:** Alright. Keep us up to date, then.
 > 
@@ -124,7 +124,7 @@
 > 
 > **Yared:** This is quite true, my dear wag. They can't vote. They have no say in our political affairs out here, just as we have no say in theirs. How could we? I mean, sure, I bet some of them read DDR posts and wonder *what the hell is going on out there?* But consider what their politics must look like to us. What would *we* vote on? Whether or not they must post signage that their sims allow non-euclidean space? Is it okay for you to try and impersonate someone when you can become like them to exacting detail (except for, surprise, their individual personality)?
 > 
-> **Yared:** I think we're still split pretty evenly on speciation. Even I am. One day, I'll think, "Sure, they may be fundamentally different from us, but they still *think* like us. They still reason like humans. Except for the biological differences, they still are." Other days, though, I'll wake up and think, "We we have no common frame of reference with these people. They're just too different."
+> **Yared:** I think we're still split pretty evenly on speciation. Even I am. One day, I'll think, "Sure, they may be fundamentally different from us, but they still *think* like us. They still reason like humans. Except for the biological differences, they still are." Other days, though, I'll wake up and think, "We have no common frame of reference with these people. They're just too different."
 > 
 > **Yared:** This actually came up in a few conversations with my friends sys-side. It sounds like they share some of that ambivalence toward speciation. They can't interface with phys-side as we can, and we can't interface with sys-side as they can, so how could they even be considered the same species as us? And yet here they are, taking place in a political debate as filigreed and baroque as any other, and doing so with the same rational minds that we have, even if only at one remove. "At this point," one of them said as we laughed over another fruitless debate. "I'm not even sure we should be discussing individual rights with governments that have no way of knowing how we work. We might as well just secede and end the discussion there."
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