From 78882db557ec14ea4058bd4de1d7480e654f1a20 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Madison Scott-Clary Date: Tue, 6 Sep 2022 20:15:06 -0700 Subject: [PATCH] update from sparkleup --- writing/post-self/mitzvot/008.md | 4 ++-- writing/post-self/mitzvot/009.md | 4 ++-- 2 files changed, 4 insertions(+), 4 deletions(-) diff --git a/writing/post-self/mitzvot/008.md b/writing/post-self/mitzvot/008.md index 47454a4e..162e4c76 100644 --- a/writing/post-self/mitzvot/008.md +++ b/writing/post-self/mitzvot/008.md @@ -78,11 +78,11 @@ She darted around the coffee table, knocking against it hard enough to send both "Home! Anywhere!" -It didn't seem open to discussion, and enough of her panic had built up in em by now that ey quickly stepped from the sim to home. +It didn't seem open to discussion, and enough of her panic had built up in em by now that ey quickly stepped from the sim to home, yanking True Name along with. To home and chaos. -There was a flurry of activity down the short hall from the entryway, several instances of May blinking into and out of existence, along with several more of the same man they'd seen at the shop. She was forking close enough each instance of him to exercise the collision algorithms of the sim, knocking him this way and that to keep him away from her. She was screaming, "Get the fuck out! I am not her! Get *out!*" +There was a flurry of activity down the short hall from the entryway, several instances of May blinking into and out of existence, along with several more of the same man they'd seen at the shop. She was forking close enough to each instance of him to exercise the collision algorithms of the sim, knocking him this way and that to keep him away from her. She was screaming, "Get the fuck out! I am not her! Get *out!*" "May!" diff --git a/writing/post-self/mitzvot/009.md b/writing/post-self/mitzvot/009.md index cde879c4..2719b03a 100644 --- a/writing/post-self/mitzvot/009.md +++ b/writing/post-self/mitzvot/009.md @@ -40,7 +40,7 @@ The skunk looked down to the ground, brow furrowed. "I suppose if he knew she wa "I guess," ey said, though the words lacked conviction to eir ears. "Then she grabbed my hand and told me to go." -"She grabbed--" She hesitated, mastered a sudden swell of anger, then subsided. "It makes sense, I suppose. The chance that you would head some place that she and Jonas could not guess is greater than if she had chosen. Ioan, my dear, you are pacing a hole in the path." +"She grabbed--" She hesitated, mastered a sudden swell of anger, then subsided. "It makes sense, I suppose. The chance that you would head someplace that she and Jonas could not guess is greater than if she had chosen. Ioan, my dear, you are pacing a hole in the path." "Sorry, May," ey said, trying to stand still. "It's just a little nuts." @@ -72,7 +72,7 @@ She waved the idea away with a paw. "If it is an issue, we will discuss it. If i She leaned against eir side, resting her head on eir shoulder. "I am sorry, my dear. It is one of those things that is not a concern until it suddenly very fucking is." -Ey ruffled a hand through the fur between the skunk's ears, the settled eir arm around her shoulders. "I'll tell you what all I find there, and we can both hope it's nothing. What will you do, meanwhile?" +Ey ruffled a hand through the fur between the skunk's ears, then settled eir arm around her shoulders. "I'll tell you what all I find there, and we can both hope it's nothing. What will you do, meanwhile?" "I am not sure. I do not particularly want to come with if they are looking for someone who looks like me. I will stay here and I guess keep an eye on our...ah, guest."