update from sparkleup

writing/post-self/toledot/launch/launch/Codrin-pollux/002.md

@@ -22,7 +22,7 @@ Codrin bent down to pluck a thin stem of grass as they walked, fiddling with it
 
 The fox frowned, but nodded to Codrin all the same.
 
-"It was just hard to hear you say "I want to die" so plainly."
+"It was just hard to hear you say, "I want to die" so plainly."
 
 It squeezed eir hand in its paw again, but remained silent.
 

writing/post-self/toledot/secession/phys/Yared/004.md

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 > What heartens me more than that, however, is to see some names that I had previously seen arguing *against* independent rights now campaigning *for* them (or, at the very least, neutral in tone). This is how the DDR is meant to work: it's a forum for us, the rank and file of the nations of the world, to be able to participate in the legislative process that will bind us in more ways than of old. No more relying solely on representatives. No more collecting signatures for yet another petition that will fall on deaf ears. No more letter writing campaigns that doubtless fed countless shredders and trash folders.
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-> To those arguing for independent rights, keep working hard, as there is still much to be done, but to those who arguing against this referendum, I would like to address a few of those points that seem to keep cropping up:
+> To those arguing for independent rights, keep working hard, as there is still much to be done, but to those who are arguing against this referendum, I would like to address a few of those points that seem to keep cropping up:
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 > *The System has no meaningful way for us to control its goings on, and thus could be a good place for disaffected citizens to coordinate with phys-side agents on acts of terrorism.*
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 > Disregarding the Council of Eight's mandate to "guide but not govern", I'm curious, now! What would a "clear news source" would look like?
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-> When one thinks about news sources here, one thinks of a stream of information about concrete events: what hurricane hit which part of North America; what stock jumped to what price; what the cricket scores are. These are all *things.* The all have to do with *stuff* or *places* or *money.*
+> When one thinks about news sources here, one thinks of a stream of information about concrete events: what hurricane hit which part of North America; what stock jumped to what price; what the cricket scores are. These are all *things.* They all have to do with *stuff* or *places* or *money.*
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 > Think of one thing that has made news recently that does not have to do with any of those things. I will preempt many of your examples:
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 > I would say that I do, but lets be honest, I can't even begin to understand those, but I can certainly respect their rights to have them.
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-> Now, tell me what effective governance looks like in such a system. Resources are controlled through the reputation market. As far as I can tell, there is no murder, there are no wars, fights can be over in a blink if one of the parties just leaves, and the worst offense someone can commit is stalking, and even then,  once can be bounced from a sim.
+> Now, tell me what effective governance looks like in such a system. Resources are controlled through the reputation market. As far as I can tell, there is no murder, there are no wars, fights can be over in a blink if one of the parties just leaves, and the worst offense someone can commit is stalking, and even then, one can be bounced from a sim.
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 > We come yet again to the idea of speciation. We are fundamentally different. Or, to use a metaphor from the first point, this is an entire *society*, human or otherwise, that is fundamentally different, as one might see with the vast gulf between customs in different areas of the world.
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