diff --git a/diary/2021-06-10.md b/diary/2021-06-10.md index 2268b476..aa85f8f3 100644 --- a/diary/2021-06-10.md +++ b/diary/2021-06-10.md @@ -75,6 +75,20 @@ * Unreliable narrator narrating an unreliable character who is narrating the other character unreliably, jumping to conclusions - Sim is trying to overwrite her presently, but also into her future * Ambiguous ending that intends to be ambiguous and restructures the stuff before * Makyo: + * Difficulty in editing due to through writing + * Something that comes from the voice: + * Can carry a lot of smaller mistakes + * But also can stand in the way of editing + * Editing can feel like ruining the flow of the language + * Being a folk tail told over a fire by drifters: + * Didn't want it to be super explicit + * Still, as a framework, can use it to transition out of the framework, or lean into the narrator "We're going to leave sim down on the trail and head up the hill" or "I'm tired of talking about Sim and never give Ursula no time" + * Narrative voice can provide the framework + * Could be kinda funny to have it all be the convenience store clerk's imaginings + * Ursula as literally nonverbal? Ideas: + * The physicality is there, could that be that she's not passive anymore, it's stiff + * The narrator noticing those things could be the snap + * Or could just play it up a little more [^fivesections]: FIVE SCAFFOLDINGS WHEN YOU WISH TO BOOK A THING