update from sparkleup

writing/post-self/mitzvot/022.md

@@ -14,7 +14,7 @@ Ioan greeted them at the door. Ey seemed happy enough, if tired. Still smiling a
 
 As soon as they'd finished their greetings and settled on the grass in front of the house (End Waking having refused to go inside) along with Douglas, though, ey had mostly stared down into eir glass of lemonade and spoke little.
 
-Finally, Debarre nudged em gently with an elbow. "Alright, Ioan, you're gonna need to spill it at some point, here. What's going on? All we were told is that you were feeling rough about the last few days.
+Finally, Debarre nudged em gently with an elbow. "Alright, Ioan, you're gonna need to spill it at some point, here. What's going on? All we were told is that you were feeling rough about the last few days."
 
 Ey sighed and plucked at a dandelion. "Right, sorry, you two. Or three, I guess. I know I've been a bit of a mope of late. You alright to talk about True Name?"
 
@@ -30,7 +30,7 @@ Ey sighed and plucked at a dandelion. "Right, sorry, you two. Or three, I guess.
 
 The weasel and skunk both looked at each other, ears splayed.
 
-"I'd thought of that, but, uh..." Debarre cleared his through. "Well, actually hearing it put like that casts it in a bit of a different light."
+"I'd thought of that, but, uh..." Debarre cleared his throat. "Well, actually hearing it put like that casts it in a bit of a different light."
 
 "I hope that she does not mind the memories of sex to go along with the resentment," End Waking said, then laughed when Debarre poked him in the side. "We are all adults here, my dear."
 
@@ -38,7 +38,7 @@ The weasel and skunk both looked at each other, ears splayed.
 
 The skunk grinned. "So young. Debarre and I both have two centuries on you. Still, I am pretty sure that we can acknowledge the existence of sex, is what I mean."
 
-"And it doesn't exactly sound like she's a stranger to that, herself, anyway."
+"And it doesn't exactly sound like she's a stranger to that herself, anyway."
 
 End Waking blinked, taken aback. "She actually told you about Zacharias?"
 

writing/post-self/mitzvot/023.md

@@ -76,7 +76,7 @@ They laughed.
 
 Ioan furrowed eir brow. "Really?
 
-"Yeah. That she collapsed made me confront the fact that, no, I don't really want her dead or anything, that I really would hate to lose her. Even if she's not the part of my friend I like the most, not a part that I even remember seeing before, she's still *a* part of them." He hesitated, then added, "And it changed E.W. Not the forking and merging itself, but that he even did that. It sounds like May Then My Name used the fact that True Name was all worked up to force her to accept the whole merge all at once. She kind of did the same with E.W. I don't know what her message, was, but it looked like it scared the shit out of him, so he kind of did it without really thinking. They'd been talking about about Zacharias the last few days, I do know that."
+"Yeah. That she collapsed made me confront the fact that, no, I don't really want her dead or anything, that I really would hate to lose her. Even if she's not the part of my friend I like the most, not a part that I even remember seeing before, she's still *a* part of them." He hesitated, then added, "And it changed E.W. Not the forking and merging itself, but that he even did that. It sounds like May Then My Name used the fact that True Name was all worked up to force her to accept the whole merge all at once. She kind of did the same with E.W. I don't know what her message was, but it looked like it scared the shit out of him, so he kind of did it without really thinking. They'd been talking about Zacharias the last few days, I do know that."
 
 "Since her and True Name's conversation about him?"