update from sparkleup

writing/post-self/neviim/local/codrin/001.md

@@ -110,7 +110,7 @@ Ey waggled a hand. "Tense is maybe too strong a word. We were both excited, and
 
 "So dramatic," ey said, rolling eir eyes. "But you changed me enough that I became a Codrin rather than a Ioan, while Ioan remained one."
 
-*"Then My Then My Name tainted em in turn."*
+*"Then May Then My Name tainted em in turn."*
 
 "I miss them," Dear's partner said. "I can't imagine seeing them together would be anything but adorable."
 

writing/post-self/neviim/local/codrin/003.md

@@ -28,7 +28,7 @@ Ey hooked eir chin over the fox's shoulder, humming thoughtfully. "Maybe, in a w
 
 Both of eir partners laughed.
 
-"Now, though, I think resentment is a more accurate word than hate. I resent the feeling of being controlled with no recourse. She may have the brainpower and manpower and analytical skills to read everyone as thoroughly as she did, but I resent how cold she was in actually doing so; making me angry to make the result seem sensational? There's a lot of cynicism bound up in that." Ey shrugged. "There's no point in hating her. I don't dislike the System as it stands after her and Jonas's manipulation, but I resent the cynicism it took to get here. I don't resent being here, but I do resent the phys-side manipulations that led to me being here."
+"Now, though, I think resentment is a more accurate word than hate. I resent the feeling of being controlled with no recourse. She may have the brainpower and manpower and analytical skills to read everyone as thoroughly as she did, but I resent how cold she was in actually doing so; intentionally making me angry to make the result seem sensational? There's a lot of cynicism bound up in that." Ey shrugged. "There's no point in hating her. I don't dislike the System as it stands after her and Jonas's manipulation, but I resent the cynicism it took to get here. I don't resent being here, but I do resent the phys-side manipulations that led to me being here."
 
 After yawning, Dear's partner asked, "Think you'll be alright working beside her while you resent her?"
 

writing/post-self/neviim/local/codrin/004.md

@@ -140,7 +140,7 @@ Ey fiddled with eir wine glass in eir free hand as ey thought. "I think because
 
 Ey grinned. "That too, yeah."
 
-True Name raised her glass. "I will drink to that, Mx. Bălan. I will admit to feeling some of the same trepidation around not having a frame of reference. We are limited to a few letters and a language primer as yet. I do not know what to expect, and that is, as I am sure you can imagine, a somewhat frightening idea for someone such as me."
+True Name raised her glass. "I will drink to that, Mx. Bălan. I will admit to feeling some of the same trepidation around not having a frame of reference. We are limited to a few letters and a language primer as yet. I do not know what to expect, and that is, as I am sure you can imagine, a somewhat frightening idea for one such as myself."
 
 Ey raised eir glass and smiled warily, returning the subtle squeeze that Dear gave eir hand. Ey was thankful for the dim light of the candle, which let em make out the features of the two Odists sitting across from em, but not a whole lot more; ey could only hope that the same was true for them. It was enough to make out True Name's charismatic confidence, if nothing else. Ey could certainly see what the skunk was doing, deftly avoiding the question of reality, keeping the conversation flowing smoothly, guiding and steering.
 

writing/post-self/neviim/local/tycho/002.md

@@ -36,7 +36,7 @@ Tycho sat on the mossy ground beside the skunk. "I used to keep it as a place fo
 
 He leaned back on his hands beside her to look up into the night sky. "It takes in all of the information from the fisheye telescope --- or any of the telescopes, really --- and converts it into data that one can read, and then reconstructs it in here. When it's just stars, just little points of light like this, it's simple enough to display. Color temperature, relative intensity, estimated distance, and so on. When we get close to something, as we did with the Jupiter slingshot, there was too much data, as there would be from any video feed, and the sim just quit displaying anything."
 
-True Name had set the flashlight against her thigh, pointed vaguely up toward her so that he could see her in more detail. Her face was kind, open, and clearly excited. Something about the bristle of her whiskers, the angle of her ears, and the relaxed state of her cheeks worked with her smile to give the impression of wonder and delight, though if he were pressed, he would've had a hard time defining why.
+True Name had set the flashlight against her thigh, pointed vaguely up toward her so that he could see her in more detail. Her face was kind, open, and clearly excited. Something about the bristle of her whiskers, the angle of her ears, and the relaxed state of her cheeks worked with her smile to give the impression of wonder and delight, though if pressed, he would've had a hard time defining why.
 
 "Beautiful."