From b2715e0decc83e407a9129c18e250110ffa428be Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Madison Scott-Clary Date: Sun, 24 Apr 2022 21:20:06 -0700 Subject: [PATCH] update from sparkleup --- diary/2022-04-17.md | 2 +- 1 file changed, 1 insertion(+), 1 deletion(-) diff --git a/diary/2022-04-17.md b/diary/2022-04-17.md index 6582e48f..2a9ad36b 100644 --- a/diary/2022-04-17.md +++ b/diary/2022-04-17.md @@ -18,6 +18,6 @@ Coming off of "Seasons", finding a way to creatively incorporate external source I've had mixed success with this so far in my writing. With "Seasons", it was simply part of the structure of the essay to include references, but there I had the chance to explain them. In another work from back in 2018, ["Growth"](https://makyo.ink/growth/), I feel like I did an okay job of incorporating references (Rilke's first "Duino Elegy" and, of all things, Frank Herbert's *Dune*). -Less successful was the book [*Qoheleth*](https://qoheleth.makyo.ink/) which had an [entire section](https://qoheleth.makyo.ink/read/15/) inspired by by "Air 'Em Out". I tried to lampshade the inclusions by pointing them out, but they came off as tenuous reaches much of the time. My original excuse is that that portion of the story was released as an ARG puzzle for folks to follow, but I still could have cleaned it up better prior to publication. I've tried to do better with later books in the series (*Toledot* references "Toledot Yeshu" throughout but I try to make it transparent, *Nevi'im* relies heavily on various poems by Dickinson, and *Mitzvot* is leaning on Blake's "The Marriage of Heaven and Hell" quite unsuccessfully as yet, but that's what drafts are for). +Less successful was the book [*Qoheleth*](https://qoheleth.makyo.ink/) which had an [entire section](https://qoheleth.makyo.ink/read/15/) inspired by by "Air 'Em Out". I tried to lampshade the inclusions by pointing them out, but they came off as tenuous reaches much of the time. My original excuse is that that portion of the story was released as an ARG puzzle for folks to follow, but I still could have cleaned it up better prior to publication. I've tried to do better with later books in the series ([*Toledot*](https://toledot.makyo.ink) references "Toledot Yeshu" throughout but except for one instance I tred to make it transparent, [*Nevi'im*](https://neviim.makyo.ink) relies heavily on various poems by Dickinson, and *Mitzvot* is leaning on Blake's "The Marriage of Heaven and Hell" --- quite unsuccessfully as yet, but that's what drafts are for). There are a few albums that I feel hold together well enough to listen to from start to finish, and this one tops the list for me. It's like sitting down to a well told, well acted audio drama with spotless production for the music. I'm a fan.