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@@ -115,7 +115,7 @@ True Name leaned back against the couch and stared out the picture windows into
 
 Ioan nodded, saying, "Sort of like Michelle and Sasha?"
 
-She laughed. "No, not quite like that, thankfully. There are some similarities --- the sense of there being two parts of me, the internal split --- but it is lacking the dire nature, whatever it was that made her completely helpless before the duality of her self. It is still something that I can override. I can respond as True Name would or as End Waking would, but I am still just me, and I am learning to unify those natures. I am becoming a synthesis."
+She laughed. "No, not quite like that, thankfully. There are some similarities --- the sense of there being two parts of me, the internal split --- but it is lacking the dire nature, whatever it was that made her completely helpless before the duality of her self. It is still something that I can override. I can respond as True Name would or as End Waking would, but I am still just me, and I am learning to unify those natures. I will perhaps never be singular, but I am at least becoming a synthesis."
 
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@@ -133,7 +133,7 @@ She winced. "That bad?"
 
 "End Waking mentioned that he defined himself by not being you, yeah."
 
-She nodded. "So I have noticed. Perhaps that is why it is proving to be such a project to settle into a singular nature again. I imagine that, given that May Then My Name has defined herself through something unique to her rather than some aspect of her relation to me, it would feel strange, but not so uncomfortable. Do correct me if I am wrong, though, my dear."
+She nodded. "So I have noticed. Perhaps that is why it is proving to be such a project to settle into something resembling a singular nature again. I imagine that, given that May Then My Name has defined herself through something unique to her rather than some aspect of her relation to me, it would feel strange, but not so uncomfortable. Do correct me if I am wrong, though, my dear."
 
 She shook her head.
 
@@ -173,7 +173,7 @@ Ey laughed. "Really, *really* complicated."
 
 May nodded.
 
-"And I also think I understand your reasons for wanting to merge down. It would make me understand your compunctions about me in a very real way, and would make me all the more complete of a person, yes?"
+"And I also think I understand your reasons for wanting to merge down. It would make me understand your compunctions about me in a very real way, and would make me all the more complete a person in your eyes, yes?"
 
 Another nod.