From c5e77f09ab638a8132d463b7585336230efa564c Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: Madison Scott-Clary Date: Sun, 19 Apr 2020 13:10:03 -0700 Subject: [PATCH] update from sparkleup --- writing/post-self/qoheleth/Carter/004.md | 12 ++++++------ writing/post-self/qoheleth/index.md | 2 +- 2 files changed, 7 insertions(+), 7 deletions(-) diff --git a/writing/post-self/qoheleth/Carter/004.md b/writing/post-self/qoheleth/Carter/004.md index 052e647b..849cd6f9 100644 --- a/writing/post-self/qoheleth/Carter/004.md +++ b/writing/post-self/qoheleth/Carter/004.md @@ -61,7 +61,7 @@ Easy enough to find the theater by following the crowds. Her identity --- and th Carter was first surprised by just how much she enjoyed the play, then chagrined at her surprise. She had decided not to approach cast or crew beforehand, a fact that initially worried her, suspecting she would spend the entirety of the play thinking of what to say. She wound up engrossed in the performance all the same. -Lying to parents. Moving through the party. The awkwardness of meeting for the first time. The cast nailed it. She'd had her own long-distance fling while an undergrad, and she knew that feeling well. *Meet at a public space where you know people,* mom had even cautioned. *Like a party. Just in case.* +Lying to parents. Moving through the party. The awkwardness of meeting for the first time. The cast nailed it all. She'd had her own long-distance fling while an undergrad, and she knew the feeling well. *Meet at a public space where you know people,* mom had even cautioned. *Like a party. Just in case.* It was well into the third act of three that she realized she hadn't given any thought to the sound of the play. A passing thought: this was probably a good thing, this was the sign of a job well done. An understudy, perhaps? @@ -77,7 +77,7 @@ The bulky man turned toward her with a pleasant, if bland, smile. A smile, despi "Mm." The sound was assent, but only just. The rest of the audience was starting to stream out of the theater, his mind was elsewhere. -"I was...It's just, about RJ-" +"I was...It's just, about RJ--" The immediate focus of Johansson's attention was a heat lamp against her face. The intensity of it startled Carter out of speech. @@ -95,10 +95,10 @@ Johansson took her elbow gently in his grip and led her off to the side, out of The growl was immediate, hidden behind gritted teeth. "The paramedics told me I couldn't contact anyone but the hospital, but the rag said you guys had declined contact." -Carter straightened and shook her head. "We did not, nor would we have. Although, I must admit, the interview process would be far more formal with this. I only put the pieces together based on location and pronouns." +Carter straightened and shook her head. "We did not, nor would we have. Although, I must admit, the interview process would be far more formal than this. I only put the pieces together based on location and pronouns." -"So what do you want from us?" Johansson's shoulders sagged, the intensity lessened, permitting emotion. "We miss RJ. It's been a real mess without em. Please, miss-" +"So what do you want from us?" Johansson's shoulders sagged, the intensity lessened, permitting emotion. "We miss RJ. It's been a real mess without em. Please, miss--" -"Ramirez. Dr. Carter Ramirez." She hesitated for a moment before continuing. "We're looking for...well, a few of us are looking for social connections between the lost, rather than just simple personality correlations. What can you tell us about RJ in that sense?" +"Ramirez. Dr. Carter Ramirez." She hesitated for a moment before continuing. "We're looking for...well, a few of us are looking for social connections between the lost, rather than just simple personality or neurlogical correlations. What can you tell us about RJ in that sense?" -Johansson looked up to his cast, then leaned a little closer to murmur, "O'Niell's, once we're done, then we can talk. I have more to do here, so it may be a while. Please wait up, though." +Johansson looked up to his cast, then leaned a little closer to murmur, "O'Niell's, once we're done. Then we can talk. I have more to do here, so it may be a while. Please wait up, though." diff --git a/writing/post-self/qoheleth/index.md b/writing/post-self/qoheleth/index.md index c6ec3dcb..f7a42a2f 100644 --- a/writing/post-self/qoheleth/index.md +++ b/writing/post-self/qoheleth/index.md @@ -150,7 +150,7 @@ Check when edited * [X] Chapter: [Carter 003](Carter/003) --- Neutrois patient, spoiled by tabloid * [X] Chapter: [RJ 006](RJ/006) --- Finding microphone, making notes * [X] Chapter: [Qoheleth 001](Qoheleth/001-a) --- Spying on Dear and Ioan - * [O] Chapter: [Carter 004](Carter/004) --- Planning to visit Johansson + * [X] Chapter: [Carter 004](Carter/004) --- Planning to visit Johansson * [O] Chapter: [RJ 007](RJ/007) --- Sleeping in the auditorium * [O] Chapter: [Qoheleth 001](Qoheleth/001-b) --- archive * [O] Chapter: [Carter 005](Carter/005) --- Pub with Johansson