update from sparkleup

writing/post-self/neviim/ioan/002.md

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 > *Convergence T-plus 10 days, 2 hours, 3 minutes*  
 > *(Castor--Lagrange transmission delay: 30 days, 14 hours, 36 minutes)*
 
-Ioan knew that it would be quite a while yet before eir and May's forks merged back down. Time Is A Finger Pointing At Itself, the director of the play was quite strict but she also drank like a fish and clung jealously to some remnant of productions she'd remembered from more than two centuries ago, so it had become a comfortable rhythm for Ioan, May, and any other actors who wished to join to follow her to a pub that served strong drinks and greasy food.
+Ioan knew that it would be quite a while yet before eir and May's forks merged back down. Time Is A Finger Pointing At Itself, the director of the play, was quite strict but she also drank like a fish and clung jealously to some remnant of productions she'd remembered from more than two centuries ago, so it had become a comfortable rhythm for Ioan, May, and any other actors who wished to join to follow her to a pub that served strong drinks and greasy food.
 
-Ey had been planning on a simple dinner on eir own, perhaps catching up on some reading, but with this knowledge and the fact that May was now here with em, the plan evolved into something more involved. Staying inside didn't feel right. Something about the news had them in mind of stars, in mind of looking up to the sky, so they wound up grilling burgers out on the patio and talked as they watched the stars come out one by one, sitting there in the house's back yard.
+Ey had been planning on a simple dinner on eir own, perhaps catching up on some reading, but with this knowledge and the fact that May was now here with em, the plan evolved into something more involved. Staying inside didn't feel right. Something about the news had them in mind of stars, in mind of looking up to the sky, so they wound up grilling burgers out on the patio and talked as they watched the stars come out one by one, sitting there in the house's backyard.
 
 The burgers had long since been finished and the grill long since put away when Ioan felt an automated sensorium ping of someone entering the house, followed shortly by a real-time message from who had just arrived.
 
@@ -55,7 +55,7 @@ Ioan marveled at the sight of the skunk. She had always seemed so proud and in c
 
 There was a tight silence that lingered a long few seconds before True Name nodded. "We did not count on you. We did not count on *both* of you. We did not count on..." She took a shaky breath, recomposed herself, and continued. "We did not count on what changes the dynamic between you two would lead to."
 
-"Your models included a historian, you mean," Ioan said. "And now you also have one of your own. You've got two actors, one of whom was purpose built by you specifically to influence others."
+"Your models included a historian, you mean," Ioan said. "And now you also have one of your own. You've got two actors, one of whom was purpose-built by you specifically to influence others."
 
 She looked stricken, gaze jumping between em and May. "When one has lived so long with a certain set of expectations, having them subverted is a shock. May Then My Name, I do not begrudge you your feelings toward me. It is not my goal to win you back or anything like that; all I can do is admit my shortcomings and try to do better by you, even if that is, as you have requested, leaving you be. I truly am happy for you --- for both of you --- as you have accomplished something that I never could, that Michelle struggled with from the beginning. However, I have a job. I have goals to work towards. I have a vision that I would like above all things to uphold."
 
@@ -73,7 +73,7 @@ The skunk giggled again, sounding even less grounded, then rested her elbows on
 
 "Make your pitch, then," May said, voice softer still.
 
-"It is a small ask, I hope," The skunk said, folding her hands on the tabletop once more. "Do not publish any of this information in the feeds or in some new book or play, and do not put it anywhere in the perisystem architecture. Not yet. I ask that you keep it between yourselves, Jonas, me, and other Odists. You may, of course, keep communicating with Castor, but I would ask that you not pass this on to Pollux yet. Codrin and True Name are working together, per the message I received, so I imagine our messages will contain similar content, but should anything interesting come up, I would be much obliged if you shared with me. Are you open to that?"
+"It is a small ask, I hope," the skunk said, folding her hands on the tabletop once more. "Do not publish any of this information in the feeds or in some new book or play, and do not put it anywhere in the perisystem architecture. Not yet. I ask that you keep it between yourselves, Jonas, me, and other Odists. You may, of course, keep communicating with Castor, but I would ask that you not pass this on to Pollux yet. Codrin and True Name are working together, per the message I received, so I imagine our messages will contain similar content, but should anything interesting come up, I would be much obliged if you shared with me. Are you open to that?"
 
 "Sure," Ioan said.
 
@@ -97,7 +97,7 @@ May stood as well and stepped around the table, taking the other skunk's paws in
 
 Ioan marveled. If the sight of two skunks that shared so much in common and yet differed in such fundamental ways was uncanny, seeing them touch in like this after so much acrimonious history bordered on distressing.
 
-"You wrote to me in back in 197," May said. "You pointed me toward Ioan and you told me, "You are, in many ways, a better version of me, and the completeness that you bring to our stanza ensures that we add up to something that is greater than the sum of its parts". You told me that you still love me in your own way. Do you remember that?"
+"You wrote to me back in 197," May said. "You pointed me toward Ioan and you told me, "You are, in many ways, a better version of me, and the completeness that you bring to our stanza ensures that we add up to something that is greater than the sum of its parts." You told me that you still love me in your own way. Do you remember that?"
 
 The skunk canted her ears back and nodded.