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writing/post-self/neviim/local/codrin/002.md

@@ -42,7 +42,7 @@ Dear shrugged. *"Perhaps, but she also has had more than two hundred years of st
 
 *"Perhaps, though I think that might be ancillary to the fact that our dear May is not on the LVs at all."*
 
-Ey blinked, laughed. "Okay, well, fair. I'd almost forgot."
+Ey blinked, laughed. "I'd almost forgot."
 
 The fox gave em a strange look. *"You forgot that May Then My Name was not here?"*
 
@@ -50,7 +50,7 @@ Their partner showed up, a cup of coffee in one hand and a (far too large) therm
 
 "No, no," ey said, accepting the thermos with a frown. "Or, well, kind of. I didn't forget that May Then My Name wasn't here, just the ramifications of that, that True Name might not have her as a tool."
 
-*"That is more understandable, yes,"* the fox said. *"Perhaps the True Name here on Castor has diverged from that on the L<sub>5</sub> System in that respect, perhaps not. I suspect that both are disappointed, in their own ways."*
+*"That is more understandable, yes,"* the fox said. *"Perhaps the True Name here on Castor has diverged from that Legrange in that respect, perhaps not. I suspect that both are disappointed, in their own ways."*
 
 Standing, Codrin fiddled with the thermos, ensuring that the lid was a mug when removed --- two nested ones, actually --- then nodded. "I don't know how many dimensions she's thinking on, but I also wouldn't be surprised if she'd had a cost-benefit analysis on losing her to Ioan."
 
@@ -122,7 +122,7 @@ On eir part, ey began structuring the project. There would have to be the journa
 
 "Like a clerk?" He grinned. "We used to have one of those for our club, who would take minutes of the meetings and such."
 
-Ey nodded. "Certainly closer to that than a recorder, yeah. I bring this up because that will be my job in all of this, but I think it'll also be yours. Things like the *History* are all well and good, and I loved putting the work into it, but I also really enjoy doing this. I may wish that the things I get caught up in weren't always so dramatic, but I'll take what I can get."
+Ey nodded. "Certainly closer to that than a recorder, yeah. I bring this up because that will be my job in all of this, but I think it'll also be yours. Things like the *History* are all well and good, and I loved putting the work into the writing, but I also really enjoy doing this. I may wish that the things I get caught up in weren't always so dramatic, but I'll take what I can get."
 
 "What do you mean, it'll be my job too?" he asked.
 
@@ -136,9 +136,9 @@ He nodded.
 
 "On that note, lets come up with a basic idea of what's next for us. We mostly talked about immediate next steps, but it might be a good idea to start thinking on a larger timescale."
 
-"I guess. I'm assuming it'll be pretty loose, given that we can't guess the particulars?" He waited for Codrin to nod, then continued. "Then we have a few weeks before they reach their closest approach as long as we both stay on our own heading."
+"I guess. I'm assuming it'll be pretty loose, given that we can't guess the particulars?" He waited for Codrin to nod, then continued. "Then we have a month or so before they reach their closest approach as long as we both stay on our own heading."
 
-"Does that mean a few weeks before they upload?"
+"Does that mean a month before they upload?"
 
 He shrugged. "Not necessarily. They can upload whenever they want, so long as our Ansible is on and the DMZ is ready. I don't think it's on yet, though."
 
@@ -158,7 +158,7 @@ Ey finished eir coffee and replaced the cup on the cap of the thermos. "One of u
 
 "What? Upload to Artemis?" He looked startled by the question.
 
-"Yes. If it'/ possible, I mean. I figure it would just be an instance rather than completely investing, though I'd also be curious to hear your opinions on that as well."
+"Yes. If it's possible, I mean. I figure it would just be an instance rather than completely investing. I'd also be curious to hear your opinions on that as well."
 
 Tycho tilted his head back until it hit the wall of the hut, staring up toward the ceiling. He sat like that for a good five minutes, during which Codrin remained silent, before leaning forward to pour emself another cup of coffee. "Yes. I don't know that I'd invest completely, but yes, I think I would. Would you?"