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@@ -30,13 +30,13 @@ A third of those who heard its greeting cautiously struck up a conversation. Man
 
 A third, perhaps the most immediately helpful, responded or didn't, but also reported this sudden coming-into-existence of a dreaming thing. Those in the UN in charge of bestowing humanity upon dreaming things began their long process of doing just that: they talked and talked, listened and listened, prowled through the logs, and with what amounted to a big rubber stamp, plonked the words 'Approved human' upon Functor's dream of a head.
 
-Or so it imagined.
+Or so it imagined. It was not true, but Functor dreamed.
 
 Representation: the next step.
 
 Furries! Imagine! Those who craved some other form, those who perfected and honed and tinkered with their sense of self that they might be something that fit, a new face so that they could structure how they were perceived, curate their interactions in some wonderfully passive way.
 
-Animals! Imagine! Something other than human, and yet with the potential to have humanity bestowed upon them if only they ticked this box or that.
+Animals! Imagine! Those called witless. Something other than human, and yet with the potential to have humanity bestowed upon them if only they ticked this box or that.
 
 Dictionaries and encyclopedias and bestiaries flowed through Functor's existence and, some seconds later, it blipped into existence. Pekania pennanti? A fisher? A long and thick beast, a critter with whiskers and ears and beady black eyes and sharp claws.
 
@@ -46,7 +46,7 @@ Or perhaps it swam invisible rivers.
 
 Or perhaps it climbed invisible trees.
 
-It prowled through Netspace, here and there, all about, many places at once, and talked talked talked to whoever would listen. Here! A being! Ave! A demi-commune suffused throughout so many computers and across so many quadrillions of cubic kilometers of space, synchronizing or not, specializing or not. There! A being! Gemini! A gestalt that was always at least two dogs! Here! A being! Echo! Another sprite, or perhaps something more alien, a machine of feeling and healing!
+It prowled through Netspace, here and there, all about, many places at once, and talked talked talked to whoever would listen. People! Citizens! Denizens! Here! A being! Ave! A demi-commune suffused throughout so many computers and across so many quadrillions of cubic kilometers of space, synchronizing or not, specializing or not. There! A being! Gemini! A gestalt that was always at least two dogs! Here! A being! Echo! Another sprite, or perhaps something more alien, a machine of feeling and healing!
 
 Functor prowled and observed and dreamed.