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writing/sawtooth/limerent-object/discernment.md

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 "I see. Do you doubt in our Lord Jesus Christ?"
 
-"No, no. Just...I find myself doubting, uh...I find myself doubting my role in the church."
+"No, no. Just...I find myself doubting, uh...I find myself doubting my upcoming role in the Church."
 
-"What about the church do you doubt, if your faith is solid?"
+"What about the Church do you doubt, if your faith is solid?"
 
 "I can't put my finger on it."
 
@@ -110,9 +110,9 @@ There was a quiet sigh from the other side of the screen.
 
 It was Dee's turn to wait in silence. Eventually, he bowed his head and said, "That is all, Father. For these and all of my sins, I ask forgiveness from God, and penance and absolution from you."
 
-There was a pause, and then, "Alright, I will ask you to say three Our Fathers for doubting in the path that God has laid out for you. We all have roles to play in our lives, and through us, God works within the world. It could be that you are still discovering this path, but doubt will only hinder you from carrying out His works. However, my son--" The priest rushed to forestall Dee, and the coyote could hear a smile creeping into his voice. "Outside of your penance, I would also like you to talk to your advisor. As your confessor, I can only offer you spiritual guidance."
+There was a pause, and then, "Alright, I will ask you to say three Our Fathers for doubting the path that God has laid out for you. It could be that you are still discovering this path, but doubt will only hinder you from carrying out His works. However, my son--" The priest rushed to forestall Dee, and the coyote could hear a smile creeping into his voice. "Outside of your penance, I would also like you to talk to your advisor. As your confessor, I can only offer you spiritual guidance."
 
-Dee splayed his ears, chagrined, and bowed his head. "Thank you, Father. O my God, I am heartily sorry for having offended Thee, and I detest all my sins..."
+Dee splayed his ears, chagrined, and bowed his head. "Thank you, Father."
 
 With the final *go in peace* still ringing in his ears, with the tips of his fingers still humming from crossing himself, with the hot flush of embarrassment still pulling at his cheeks, Dee stepped from the confessional and blinked in the sudden light and space. He took two quick, grounding breaths, and then walked from the chapel.
 
@@ -123,7 +123,7 @@ Outside Dee walked slowly to one of the concrete blocks that served as benches a
 *Out of the depths I cry to you, O Lord. Lord, hear my voice! Let yours ears be attentive to the voice of my supplications...*
 <!-- Continue, expand with him praying as he thinks -->
 
-He was not ready yet. Not ready for his penitential *patres nostri*. Not ready to go see his advisor. He didn't feel ready for anything.
+He was not ready yet. Not ready for his penitential *pater noster*. Not ready to go see his advisor. He didn't feel ready for anything.
 
 *...If you, O Lord, should mark iniquities, Lord, who could stand? But there is forgiveness with you so that you may be revered...*
 
@@ -161,9 +161,9 @@ Rev. Dr. Borenson leaned forward, rested his arms on his desk, and fiddled with
 
 "Sorry, Father." Dee frowned down at his paws. Paws grown soft, this far away from home. Some part of his mind, the part always focused on making comparisons, realized how slender and small they were compared to his advisor's big canine mitts. "I think I was expecting a different reaction."
 
-The Saint Bernard shrugged. It was an oddly informal, almost bashful gesture. "I'm just not surprised. This doesn't feel like it's coming out of nowhere."
+The Saint Bernard shrugged. It was an informal, almost bashful gesture. "I'm just not surprised. This doesn't feel like it's coming out of nowhere."
 
-"It's not apostasy, I have no plans of leaving the church."
+"I have no plans of leaving the Church."
 
 "Of course, Dee. I have no doubts as to your faith."
 
@@ -207,7 +207,7 @@ With his possessions packed away, Dee had little to do beyond pray and spend as
 
 "Technically," Borenson had confided. "You shouldn't have access to anything but the refectory, the chapel, and your room for the remainder of your time on campus, but I don't think anyone will begrudge you access to your beloved books."
 
-The Saint Bernard was waiting for him, sitting on the stone and cement bench by the statue of St Kateri Tekakwitha. The dog had rested his shoulders on his knees and clasped his hands, and was looking down between his feet through the opening this has created. Or, well, not looking. Father Borenson was not looking at anything.  He had the absent expression of thought or prayer.
+The Saint Bernard was waiting for him, sitting on the stone and cement bench by the statue of Saint Kateri Tekakwitha. The dog had rested his shoulders on his knees and clasped his hands, and was looking down between his feet through the opening this has created. Or, well, not looking. Father Borenson was not looking at anything.  He had the absent expression of thought or prayer.
 
 Dee had been making a round of all his favorite spots on this, his last day, and his final stop was here. A statue, a stone bench, a lake. Trees and heavy air.
 
@@ -235,7 +235,7 @@ Dee nodded numbly. This was already wildly outside of his normal interactions wi
 
 "Now, we see it more like a process. Discernment is something that takes place over time. You're in your twenties, you're not going to have it all figured out, much as you might sometimes imagine."
 
-Dee frowned. *St. Kateri Tekakwitha,* he prayed silently. *Favored child and Lily of the Mohawks, I come to seek your intercession in my present need. I don't know what to do...*
+Dee frowned. *Saint Kateri Tekakwitha,* he prayed silently. *Favored child and Lily of the Mohawks, I come to seek your intercession in my present need. I don't know what to do...*
 
 "It's a little clumsy, but the analogy I always use is to think of these first few years of your degree like dating. You and the Church --- the Church as an institution, not just a faith --- like each other, and want to maybe get closer, but you're going to try things on for size for a bit. See how it works out."