update from sparkleup

writing/post-self/toledot/launch/phys/Douglas/008.md

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 > **May Then My Name:** We can go out for drinks and build up your tolerance again, or you can go walk some place that has a horizon. Ioan took me on a hike a while back, we can take you there.
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-> **Douglas:** Before long. Probably within the year, actually.
+> **Douglas:** Before long. A few months, probably, so that I can finish things up here.
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 > **May Then My Name:** !!!
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 > **May Then My Name:** Anyway, I messaged you to ask you about something that you have mentioned a few times so far. Do you have it in you to answer some questions?
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-> **Douglas:** Sure, why not. My first meeting is in the afternoon, tomorrow, and it's just a weekly safety briefing. Talk my ear off! I could use the distraction.
+> **Douglas:** Sure, why not. My first meeting is in the afternoon, tomorrow, and it's just a weekly safety briefing. Talk my ear off, I could use the distraction.
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 > **May Then My Name:** Yes, you certainly could.
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 > **Douglas:** Oh, sure.
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-> **Douglas:** There were two big ones and one small one. You heard the small one, which was that tech knocking me off the edge of the torus. The other techs out there with us tackled him and tied him up in his own tether to bring him back into the station. One of them suggested just ripping off his suit there, but it was a reaction out of anger, and it's hard to stay angry out in space when you're all terrified of dying anyway, so they did the right thing.
+> **Douglas:** There were two big ones and one small one. You heard the small one, which was that tech knocking me off the edge of the torus. The other techs out there with us tackled him and tied him up in his own tether to bring him back into the station. One of them suggested just ripping off his suit then and there, but thatwas a reaction out of anger, and it's hard to stay angry out in space when you're all terrified of dying anyway, so they did theright thing.
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 > **Douglas:** He was brought inside, taped to a chair (there used to be a security station with a cell for when the torus was a hotel, but it was repurposed at some point), and then confined to quarters until the next shuttle could come pick him up.
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 > **Douglas:** That virus or whatever that was getting people stuck in the 'net? Didn't that hit Michelle?
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-> **May Then My Name:** Yes. Remember when I talked about how she had 80% bad days? That is why.
+> **May Then My Name:** Yes. Remember when I talked about how 80% her days were bad days? That is why.
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 > **Douglas:** Oh, shit. Yeah, I can see how that'd be terrifying, then.
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 > **Douglas:** They said it had political undertones because of the articles of secession. "No other governmental entity shall declare war on or attempt to destroy the System."
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-> **May Then My Name:** They considered it an act of war?
+> **May Then My Name:** They worried it might be considered it an act of war?
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 > **Douglas:** I guess so. If it was an act of war, then the System could retaliate. I'm sure they told someone over there who needed to know
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 > **Douglas:** Well, our conversations are off the record, now. Besides, if I'm going to upload soon, it's also relevant to me in the same way it is to you.
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-> **May Then My Name:** Well, alright. How were they caught?
+> **May Then My Name:** It is, at that. How were they caught?
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 > **Douglas:** That's the weird thing. They turned themselves in. The cloth bomb had been in place for about a month, I guess, and they grew a conscience in that time, so they defused the bomb, brought security over, admitted to what they'd done, and let themself be sent back planet-side.
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-> **Douglas:** Which actually brings me to the other big sabotage attempt. Apparently, they were working with a collective who were really unhappy with the launch overall, so there was also a suicide bombing at a launch facility during a tour which I guess was intended to take out the control room before it could be used for the next supply run.
+> **Douglas:** Which actually brings me to the other big sabotage attempt. Apparently, they were working with a collective who were really unhappy with the launch overall, so there was also a suicide bombing at a launch facility during a tour which was intended to take out the control room before it could be used for the next supply run.
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 > **Douglas:** Cloth bomber struck a deal with the government for a lighter sentence (probably like my attacker received) for acting as an informant and ratting out the organization before the rest of the planned bombings could take place.
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 > **May Then My Name:** Do a lot of people phys-side think that the System is interfering with politics?
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-> **Douglas:** Not really, no. There was a kerfuffle around it when uploading was incentivized that essentially no one remembers except for boring people like me who had to study it. There have been a few gripes here and there as other large political changes happened, like when governments merged or recessions hit. When things like that happen, I think a lot of people instinctively look for a boogeyman to pin it on, and the System is pretty convenient because it's not like you all can fight back, so you all turn into shadowy figures behind the politicians.
+> **Douglas:** Not really, no. We learned in grad school that there was a kerfuffle around it when uploading was incentivized that essentially no one remembers except for boring people like me who had to study it. There have been a few gripes here and there as other large political changes happened, like when governments merged or recessions hit. When things like that happen, I think a lot of people instinctively look for a boogeyman to pin it on, and the System is pretty convenient because it's not like you all can fight back, so you all turn into shadowy figures behind the politicians.
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 > **May Then My Name:** Oh, that bit is definitely true.
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