<li>“The tree, <em>a jack pine,</em> sloughed the snow from its branches as if it was waking up.”<ul>
<li>uses language to imbue additional characteristics </li>
<li>using simile for personification/interiority</li>
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<li>“In awe of the jack pine, I didnot believe it until I saw it, <em>the bird’s nest hidden in its needled, benevolent arms.</em>“<ul>
<li>Above: say writing about religion, using metaphor of benevolence of trees</li>
<li>Restrictive and non-restrictive appositives:<ul>
<li>Restrictives necessary for sentence to function (e.g: including a name with a common noun)</li>
<li>Non-restrictive provide additional information, usually a separate clause (still imbues meaning or adds texture)</li>
<li>Cumulative layering: adding more non-restrictive appositives</li>
<li>Dependent clauses usually appositives, but may not add additional information, unlike appositives</li>
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<li>A cumulative sentence is known as a loose sentence that starts with independent clause, then adds subordinate elements or modifiers after subject and predicate</li>
<li>Useful for putting the main idea first, then expand</li>
<li>Example of interiority, gives inner life of the witness (writer as witness)</li>
<li>Adds to informality, connection</li>
<li>70% of sentences are cumulative</li>
<li>Variety to mix up rhythm of sentence (identify sustained rhythms as places to break)</li>
<li>Not really in dialogue, more for mood and scene-setting</li>
<li>Restraint: don’t need to layer <em>every</em> noun, just use to propel the plot or the readers</li>
<li>How much is intuitive vs deliberate? — Deliberate mostly in revision, intuitive in writing. In revision, can force it into consciousness</li>
<li>Are there styles that work better in certain genres, or are they genre agnostic? —<em>Can</em> span genres, but depends on authorial intent (e.g: minimalism, focus on plot, etc). Be strategic, be careful (e.g: if you have two compound sentences, consider a simple sentence). Use tension to speak about bigger/vaguer/more fluid things. Use tension to avoid didactic writing.</li>