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 <p>"To get lost is to go mad," Sasha spoke to the small audience that had gathered in the Crown Pub. Read, actually, for she had written the speech to give --- as Michelle Hadje rather than Sasha --- at a gathering not too dissimilar from this one earlier in the day. A digital ceremony to follow the analog. "It is perhaps indelicate to say, but it is true. To get lost is to go mad.</p>
 <p>"I think that this applies to more than just the sense that it has come to mean here and now. I think that if you go for a walk in a strange city and get lost, there is some aspect of that which is similar to madness. You walk the strange streets and see the strange people and strange buildings, and eventually, it all seems to blur together and your thoughts wander. They wander beyond the limits of your body and your mind. They soar above the city and try to make sense of these unknown, shifting shapes. They try to draw sensible paths from the turns you took. I turned left there, did I not? Or did I?"</p>
-<p>The sombre group of diverse species mostly looked at her. Animals of all shapes, anthropomorphism of all levels. Even some humans, for there was Carter, looking much as she had at that first ceremony.</p>
-<p>Some looked down. AwDae looked at her, keen-eyed. Debarre looked down, shaking with sobs.</p>
+<p>The sombre group of diverse species was mostly looking at her. Animals of all shapes, anthropomorphism of all levels. Even some humans, for there was Carter, looking much as she had at that first ceremony.</p>
+<p>And some looked down. AwDae looked at her, keen-eyed. Debarre looked down, shaking with sobs.</p>
 <p>"And to get lost in today's sense feels much the same. Your mind flies to strange places and dreams with all the logic of dreams. Only in there, when your mind dreams, so too does reality. If, that is, the word 'reality' has any meaning in this case.</p>
 <p>"And you go mad. You go mad and you try to control the dreams. You try to control them and you fail, because in the end, lucid as you may be, it is the dream which has <em>you</em>, and not the other way around. You do what you can, but you go mad. Your mind is flooded with words. They fly at you like poetry, spill from your mouth or your hands in unceasing torrents.</p>
 <p>"And there with you is all that was stored in your exocortex. All of that data, useful and useless, is in there with you. You can keep it for your very own, browse it at will, build it up into castles as tall as you like.</p>
 <p>"We are gathered tonight to remember Cicero. We're gathered because to get lost is to go mad, and now, even a year later, that madness clings to the lost like some horrid stench, hangs from us like bloated ticks. Perhaps it will fade over time, and perhaps not, but for Cicero, the lingering madness grew to be too much, overcame him like a wave, and the undertow took him from us."</p>
 <p>Debarre moaned, tried to stifle his grief with his paws.</p>
-<p>Sasha's own voice creacked as she went on. "But, even as the madness worked its awful magics on him, he gave back what he could. In his time in there, in that horrible forever, he prowled through the data left in his exo. Many of us did, but he had the advantage of being one of the first. He had the advantage of having much needed information that drew attention to those responsible for the terror we all lived through, some of us directly and many, many more of you indirectly.</p>
+<p>Sasha's own voice creaked as she went on. "But, even as the madness worked its awful magics on him, he gave back what he could. In his time in there, in that horrible forever, he prowled through the data left in his exo. Many of us did, each in our own way, but he had the advantage of being one of the first. He had the advantage of having the much needed information that drew attention to those responsible for the terror we all lived through, some of us directly and many, many more of you indirectly.</p>
 <p>"I feel that madness still. Many of the lost do, perhaps all." She saw AwDae nod at this. "We owe it to Cicero and his memory to repair as best we can. To use what he gave us to help build ourselves up better than before. To, in his name, live fuller lives having known him. We owe it to him to remember him as that oh-so-intense cat with a penchant for politics. We owe it to him to remember the whole of him in all ways.</p>
 <p>"And we owe it to ourselves tonight to remember the best of him. Let us delight in each other, rejoice together."</p>
 <p>She raised a glass. "To Cicero."</p>
 <p>The crowd echoed, intent, if shaky, "To Cicero"</p>
-<p>The rest of the evening was quiet, subdued. Sasha and AwDae sat with Debarre, each to one side. They supported the weasel as he cried. Cried over his lost partner, cried over the cruelty of family which had kept him from attending the first funeral. They supported him with silence and listening.</p>
+<p>The rest of the evening was quiet, subdued. Sasha and AwDae sat with Debarre, each to one side. They supported the weasel as he cried. Cried over his lost partner, cried over the cruelty of family which had kept him from attending the day's first funeral. They supported him with silence and listening.</p>
 <p>And when he had cried himself out and was willing to admit something other than mourning into the night, then they rejoiced together.</p>
 <p>And if Sasha and AwDae were in some way distant, in some way not wholly there, Debarre either ignored it for forgave them their madness.</p>
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-<li class="done3"> Denouement<ul>
+<li class="done4"> Denouement<ul>
 <li class="done4"> Chapter: <a href="Ioan/011.html">Ioan 011</a> --- Ioan merges, begins to write, (sends Dear a sensorium message on a whim asking if ey might send a long-lived fork to stay with em to write, discuss Umwelt. Codrin Bălan, perhaps? Or Codruţ? From Romanian codru, 'woods'. Maybe asks Dear how this works. Ioan from John re bible, names important)</li>
-<li class="done3"> Chapter: <a href="Sasha/005.html">Sasha</a> --- Sasha at/after funeral, learn she's Michelle Hadje</li>
+<li class="done4"> Chapter: <a href="Sasha/005.html">Sasha</a> --- Sasha at/after funeral, learn she's Michelle Hadje</li>
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