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Nearing the 200th anniversary of System secession from humanity, the System and it’s station-side engineers prepare for a launch of two deep-space probes containing smaller versions of the System. Recognizing an inflection point for what it is, historian and author Ioan Balan begins a project to catalogue the two events, Secession and Launch, with the help of a few members of the Ode Clade, a group of individuals forked from a single ancestor, each of which focuses on a different specialization. While ey writes, collates, and edits on the original System with the help of May Then My Name Die With Me of the Ode Clade, eir own fork, Codrin Balan, heads up the research side of things on the two launches with Dear, Also, The Tree that Was Felled of the Ode Clade. Throughout the course of the investigation, it becomes clear how much the Ode Clade has influenced politics both sys-side and phys-side since the very beginning all the way up to Launch. Ioan and May Then My Name’s task becomes one of cataloging this influence and the ways that it has shaped how the System and Earth have progressed through history, surprising even May and Dear.
-By timeline/location
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-- Secession (2124 - coming up on 10 year anniversary of system)
-- System
-- Michelle Hadje continues working to shape the system into what it will eventually become.
-- She heads up the Council of Eight, early uploads who are focused on the experience of those who live in the system
-- First win was sensoria, recent win was forking, which, given that it does take some system resources, required the idea of the reputation markets
-- Is stretched too thin dealing with that, as well as trying to cope with the lingering sensations of being lost magnified in system, to deal with rights and personhood, so she shells out a good chunk of reputation to fork the first 10 lines of the Ode, letting True Name tackle rights and personhood.
-- PAYOFF: slowly gaining a sense of peace as she remembers early system history
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-- The Only Time I Know My True Name Is When I Dream (True Name) and Jonas Prime fight for rights and personhood
-- We see that humanity has given up on the stars and started to stall out. The capitalist world isn’t sure what to do with the system, yet people keep fleeing to it
-- True Name and Jonas Prime debate (asynchronously) with Earth on the subject of personhood - their argument is that they are no longer humanity’s tools (hunmanity wanting to put them to work on software, running machines in place of AIs, etc)
-- PAYOFF: win secession, thinking it was their own idea
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-- Offline
-- Yosef, who basically wants to keep the system separate from humanity (never in favor of it, sees it as a place to store inconvenient people), hires Yared to argue for personhood and, at a strategic point, suggest secession
-- PAYOFF: Unplanned but fortuitous that moving it to the L5 point comes up (torus as vacation spot/science project, just add system!) - physically remove the (private, hidden somewhere in S-R Bloc) facility from earth, out of sight, out of mind.
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-- Launch (2325 - just after launch, on bicentennial anniversary of system secession)
-- System
-- Sys-side
-- Ioan A is actually kind of eager to not be taking part in next huge thing, and to be reading and compiling Codrin’s letters from launch side. These are a constant stream from both launch systems which is obviously going to take longer and longer to reach the system as they travel further away.
-- Ioan B interviews locals who specifically did not go
-- Ioan C acts as early system historian
-- May Then Thy Name, her role as launch coordinator diminished post-launch, co-authors the story with Ioan as a permanent-yet-evolving mythology, specifically changing small details to make it grandiose, turn it into a new mythology. She also provides the historical background.
-- They are also gay for each other.
-- PAYOFF: histories are published back on Earth, awaken sense of adventure
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-- Launch-side
-- Codrin, Dear, and its partner head off in their sim, having decided not to leave forks behind
-- Codrin interviewing those who have decided to come with (both seeds are identical in crew and capacity, but will obv diverge further and further apart with time, so maybe interviews with the same people, but different answers).
-- Dear has thoughts on irreversibility of time and lack of connectedness with original system as this new thing, being totally cut off.
-- They’re all in love and incredibly gay for each other because I fucking said so.
-- PAYOFF: a signal from a similar ship via Dreamer Module. Obviously no course change, so communication is brief and then slow, but hey, confirmation. The real reason they left is that they will eventually die when they hit a star or whatever, and this tickles Dear.
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-- Offline
-- Douglas struggles with being a hermit/launch tech/coordinator but also wanting to talk with Michelle - basically his whole POV is the tech aspect of the launch, while also providing history of life outside since secession
-- REJECTED: too many characters. de and its collective struggle to get anyone to even want to prevent the launch, but humanity has mostly turned inward and lost interest in exploration, now super conservative, as life is pretty damn hellish outside their heads, leaning heavily on escapism. Uploading is seen as just sort of the thing you do when you get tired enough, if you don’t die first, etc. Jealous because upload and lose connection to earth, or remain on earth and never do anything interesting, strange desire to keep the species on the same path. Boils down to fatalism, and its story is learning why that is.
-- Kind of wondering if de should just be told through Douglas. Already a lot of characters.
-- PAYOFF: tied with May Then My Name’s histories, a renewed sense of adventure outside of the mind
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Outline
-Chapter ideas
+Notes
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+- The ships (identical) are similar to from Accelerando combined with a scissors mechanism a la Ilium and a rail gun. There’s a small version of the System (plenty of room for folks to fork, etc), an RTG for power, some external physical manipulators and materials (like 1-2 tons) for repair along the way if needed, a few attitude jets, and a light sail once it’s launched on each. Thin scaffold type thing about 10k kilometers long spun around the middle. In the scaffold is a rail gun to assist in propulsion as the ships are flung out into space by angular momentum, each in opposite directions.
+- The launch process is the first time the sys-side and phys-side have worked together in any notable capacity since secession.
+- Release should take the form of an ARG similar to the original Qoheleth.
+- The creators of the system tried to come up with better communication than just text, and could when just one was in the system via dream-reading scans, but when multiple dreamers interacted, it quickly lost focus. Can communicate at any time via text through perisystem or view one individual’s dream if they fork into a reserved spot in the perisystem(though that instance can’t merge back, just as waiting room instances can’t merge), so it’s only really good for presentations
+- Difference between conservatives and liberals is that the conservatives play with need on a very grand scale, liberals on a very small/individual scale. Ioan struggles with May after learning a lot of this about the Clade, because even if she’s earnestly in love with em, it’s like learning your inlaws are illuminati. Ey comes acround because a) she explains need for control as trauma response, and b) tells myth in progress, about how the gods created the world in an attempt to shape it to their will, but instead became impersonal forces in the face of absolute independence
+- Quote: She stood from her chair and walked up to where ey remained stubbornly seated. “If you do not wish to be unhappy with the answers to difficult questions, Ioan,” she said, tousling eir hair. “Then you do not need to ask them.” / She smiled down to em, and in that smaile was kindness, and in that kindness was a hatred ey could not fathom, and then she quit.
+- Dear says in Qoheleth that it uploaded in the 2130s after the L5 station had been set up, have to address this incongruence (either shift dates, or give it a reason to lie; probably the latter, to downplay stuff to one it does not yet trust)
+- True Name and Jonas begin wielding more and more power within the council despite the promise that forks will not influence balance of power, leads to Debarre and user11824 leaving council
+- Normalize “LVs”, capitalizing Secession, launch arms vs struts, Council of Eight only exists in Secession (now viewed as i.e: founding fathers)
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+Older stuff
+Chapter ideas
- Ioan actually gets with May, discusses irreversibility of decision b/c no earlier fork like w/ Codrin
- Both threads should start around/after the event, so Yared’s first chapter should be of him uploading on Secession Day
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-Notes
+By timeline/location
-- The ships (identical) are similar to from Accelerando combined with a scissors mechanism a la Ilium and a rail gun. There’s a small version of the System (plenty of room for folks to fork, etc), an RTG for power, some external physical manipulators and materials (like 1-2 tons) for repair along the way if needed, a few attitude jets, and a light sail once it’s launched on each. Thin scaffold type thing about 10k kilometers long spun around the middle. In the scaffold is a rail gun to assist in propulsion as the ships are flung out into space by angular momentum, each in opposite directions.
-- The launch process is the first time the sys-side and phys-side have worked together in any notable capacity since secession.
-- Release should take the form of an ARG similar to the original Qoheleth.
-- The creators of the system tried to come up with better communication than just text, and could when just one was in the system via dream-reading scans, but when multiple dreamers interacted, it quickly lost focus. Can communicate at any time via text through perisystem or view one individual’s dream if they fork into a reserved spot in the perisystem(though that instance can’t merge back, just as waiting room instances can’t merge), so it’s only really good for presentations
-- Difference between conservatives and liberals is that the conservatives play with need on a very grand scale, liberals on a very small/individual scale. Ioan struggles with May after learning a lot of this about the Clade, because even if she’s earnestly in love with em, it’s like learning your inlaws are illuminati. Ey comes acround because a) she explains need for control as trauma response, and b) tells myth in progress, about how the gods created the world in an attempt to shape it to their will, but instead became impersonal forces in the face of absolute independence
-- Quote: She stood from her chair and walked up to where ey remained stubbornly seated. “If you do not wish to be unhappy with the answers to difficult questions, Ioan,” she said, tousling eir hair. “Then you do not need to ask them.” / She smiled down to em, and in that smaile was kindness, and in that kindness was a hatred ey could not fathom, and then she quit.
-- Dear says in Qoheleth that it uploaded in the 2130s after the L5 station had been set up, have to address this incongruence (either shift dates, or give it a reason to lie; probably the latter, to downplay stuff to one it does not yet trust)
-- True Name and Jonas begin wielding more and more power within the council despite the promise that forks will not influence balance of power, leads to Debarre and user11824 leaving council
-- Normalize “LVs”, capitalizing Secession, launch arms vs struts, Council of Eight only exists in Secession (now viewed as i.e: founding fathers)
+- Secession (2124 - coming up on 10 year anniversary of system)
+- System
+- Michelle Hadje continues working to shape the system into what it will eventually become.
+- She heads up the Council of Eight, early uploads who are focused on the experience of those who live in the system
+- First win was sensoria, recent win was forking, which, given that it does take some system resources, required the idea of the reputation markets
+- Is stretched too thin dealing with that, as well as trying to cope with the lingering sensations of being lost magnified in system, to deal with rights and personhood, so she shells out a good chunk of reputation to fork the first 10 lines of the Ode, letting True Name tackle rights and personhood.
+- PAYOFF: slowly gaining a sense of peace as she remembers early system history
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+- The Only Time I Know My True Name Is When I Dream (True Name) and Jonas Prime fight for rights and personhood
+- We see that humanity has given up on the stars and started to stall out. The capitalist world isn’t sure what to do with the system, yet people keep fleeing to it
+- True Name and Jonas Prime debate (asynchronously) with Earth on the subject of personhood - their argument is that they are no longer humanity’s tools (hunmanity wanting to put them to work on software, running machines in place of AIs, etc)
+- PAYOFF: win secession, thinking it was their own idea
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+- Offline
+- Yosef, who basically wants to keep the system separate from humanity (never in favor of it, sees it as a place to store inconvenient people), hires Yared to argue for personhood and, at a strategic point, suggest secession
+- PAYOFF: Unplanned but fortuitous that moving it to the L5 point comes up (torus as vacation spot/science project, just add system!) - physically remove the (private, hidden somewhere in S-R Bloc) facility from earth, out of sight, out of mind.
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+- Launch (2325 - just after launch, on bicentennial anniversary of system secession)
+- System
+- Sys-side
+- Ioan A is actually kind of eager to not be taking part in next huge thing, and to be reading and compiling Codrin’s letters from launch side. These are a constant stream from both launch systems which is obviously going to take longer and longer to reach the system as they travel further away.
+- Ioan B interviews locals who specifically did not go
+- Ioan C acts as early system historian
+- May Then Thy Name, her role as launch coordinator diminished post-launch, co-authors the story with Ioan as a permanent-yet-evolving mythology, specifically changing small details to make it grandiose, turn it into a new mythology. She also provides the historical background.
+- They are also gay for each other.
+- PAYOFF: histories are published back on Earth, awaken sense of adventure
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+
+- Launch-side
+- Codrin, Dear, and its partner head off in their sim, having decided not to leave forks behind
+- Codrin interviewing those who have decided to come with (both seeds are identical in crew and capacity, but will obv diverge further and further apart with time, so maybe interviews with the same people, but different answers).
+- Dear has thoughts on irreversibility of time and lack of connectedness with original system as this new thing, being totally cut off.
+- They’re all in love and incredibly gay for each other because I fucking said so.
+- PAYOFF: a signal from a similar ship via Dreamer Module. Obviously no course change, so communication is brief and then slow, but hey, confirmation. The real reason they left is that they will eventually die when they hit a star or whatever, and this tickles Dear.
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+
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+
+- Offline
+- Douglas struggles with being a hermit/launch tech/coordinator but also wanting to talk with Michelle - basically his whole POV is the tech aspect of the launch, while also providing history of life outside since secession
+- REJECTED: too many characters. de and its collective struggle to get anyone to even want to prevent the launch, but humanity has mostly turned inward and lost interest in exploration, now super conservative, as life is pretty damn hellish outside their heads, leaning heavily on escapism. Uploading is seen as just sort of the thing you do when you get tired enough, if you don’t die first, etc. Jealous because upload and lose connection to earth, or remain on earth and never do anything interesting, strange desire to keep the species on the same path. Boils down to fatalism, and its story is learning why that is.
+- Kind of wondering if de should just be told through Douglas. Already a lot of characters.
+- PAYOFF: tied with May Then My Name’s histories, a renewed sense of adventure outside of the mind
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