From d4c0cc080f3a4883503c8f7a9651cc74555ba2b3 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001
From: Madison Scott-Clary <mscottclary@nvidia.com>
Date: Thu, 10 Jun 2021 12:50:53 -0700
Subject: [PATCH] update from sparkleup

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-<li>Makyo:</li>
+<li>Makyo:<ul>
+<li>Difficulty in editing due to through writing</li>
+<li>Something that comes from the voice:<ul>
+<li>Can carry a lot of smaller mistakes</li>
+<li>But also can stand in the way of editing</li>
+<li>Editing can feel like ruining the flow of the language</li>
+</ul>
+</li>
+<li>Being a folk tail told over a fire by drifters:<ul>
+<li>Didn&rsquo;t want it to be super explicit</li>
+<li>Still, as a framework, can use it to transition out of the framework, or lean into the narrator &ldquo;We&rsquo;re going to leave sim down on the trail and head up the hill&rdquo; or &ldquo;I&rsquo;m tired of talking about Sim and never give Ursula no time&rdquo;</li>
+<li>Narrative voice can provide the framework</li>
+</ul>
+</li>
+<li>Could be kinda funny to have it all be the convenience store clerk&rsquo;s imaginings</li>
+<li>Ursula as literally nonverbal? Ideas:<ul>
+<li>The physicality is there, could that be that she&rsquo;s not passive anymore, it&rsquo;s stiff</li>
+<li>The narrator noticing those things could be the snap</li>
+<li>Or could just play it up a little more</li>
+</ul>
+</li>
+</ul>
+</li>
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