update from sparkleup

writing/post-self/mitzvot/028.md

@@ -6,7 +6,7 @@ Ey laughed. "You certainly may. Weird as hell and I need a break."
 
 That last part wasn't strictly true, ey knew. Ey'd be ruminating over it until they went to sleep, and likely well into tomorrow. Still, ey agreed that it wasn't a topic for talking about at the moment. The chances they'd just wind up talking in circles, rehashing the same topics over and over again, was too high, and ey could do that mentally just as well.
 
-So, instead, they relaxed together on the couch, May with her head in eir lap while ey read and she worked on this or that, or whatever it was that she did when her eyes lost focused and she hummed quietly to herself. She'd once called it 'going into screen-saver mode', which didn't sound totally accurate to what ey knew of her when ey'd looked up the reference, but ey still teased her about it every now and then.
+So, instead, they relaxed together on the couch, May with her head in eir lap while ey read and she worked on this or that, or whatever it was that she did when her eyes lost focus and she hummed quietly to herself. She'd once called it 'going into screen-saver mode', which didn't sound totally accurate to what ey knew of her when ey'd looked up the reference, but ey still teased her about it every now and then.
 
 Quiet nights were good, though, and ey was pleased to just spend the rest of this one in comfort.
 
@@ -34,7 +34,7 @@ Ioan shrugged. "Sure."
 
 "After that second coffee, yes," May said.
 
-Breakfast, it turned out, was a Scandinavian affair, or so ey imagined. Dense, dark bread, a tray of cheeses and meats, and a separate tray of vegetables both pickled and fresh. It was strange to call a meal such as breakfast 'refreshing', but the word fit quite well. Quite good, and both of the skunks certainly seemed to appreciate it, eating the lion's share of the food, though May also swiped up side plate of bacon to go with it.
+Breakfast, it turned out, was a Scandinavian affair, or so ey imagined. Dense, dark bread, a tray of cheeses and meats, and a separate tray of vegetables both pickled and fresh. It was strange to call a meal such as breakfast 'refreshing', but the word fit quite well. Quite good, and both of the skunks certainly seemed to appreciate it, eating the lion's share of the food, though May also swiped up a side plate of bacon to go with it.
 
 May nodded towards True Name, grinning. "Alright. Payment accepted. You may begin."
 
@@ -58,7 +58,7 @@ They both nodded.
 
 "Is this about me merging down, then?"
 
-She shrugged. "I do not think that that is a requirement, here, though that question was on my docket for the day. I suspect that I have already changed enough with End Waking's merger. I would just need to prove it to him somehow. That is where my plan ends, however."
+She shrugged. "I do not think that that is a requirement here, though that question was on my docket for the day. I suspect that I have already changed enough with End Waking's merger. I would just need to prove it to him somehow. That is where my plan ends, however."
 
 Ioan sat back in eir chair, arms crossed as ey mulled it over. If she was right --- and ey suspected that she was --- then there would likely need to be a change in form and a change in name to go along with the change in attitude. After all, that's how Zacharias had gotten as far as he had, right?
 
@@ -114,7 +114,7 @@ She nodded. "She asked me to consider it, and then the topic simply never came u
 
 "Did she wind up expressing her own emotions differently from that merge?"
 
-She opened her mouth as if to reply, then closed it again, frowning. "I was going to snap at you," she admitted. "But you bring up a good point. She did, so some extent. What emotions she expressed, real or not, came more earnestly to her. She was more able to express empathy, even if it was still in a very True Name fashion. She did not accept my merges --- or any of those from others in her stanza --- as blithely as she did End Waking's."
+She opened her mouth as if to reply, then closed it again, frowning. "I was going to snap at you," she admitted. "But you bring up a good point. She did, to some extent. What emotions she expressed, real or not, came more earnestly to her. She was more able to express empathy, even if it was still in a very True Name fashion. She did not accept my merges --- or any of those from others in her stanza --- as blithely as she did End Waking's."
 
 "I imagine the circumstances were a bit different," ey said. "Why were you going to snap at me?"
 

writing/post-self/mitzvot/029.md

@@ -29,7 +29,7 @@ Ey nodded. "That much I can certainly understand. I trust that you'll be built u
 
 "Yes. I cannot predict how I will feel about anything after this, much less you. Your relationship and existing boundaries will take precedence over whatever happens, though. I will respect that."
 
-Ioan bowed eir thanks
+Ioan bowed eir thanks.
 
 "I have been wondering how your feelings toward Debarre have shifted," End Waking said.
 
@@ -151,7 +151,7 @@ The three of them stayed like that for nearly five minutes --- two skunks kneeli
 
 "Oh...oh, I cannot..." she whispered, and started to sag over to one side.
 
-Maybe shushed her quietly and helped her to lay out on her side before settling down with her. They curled together, still facing each other, nearly snout to snout and still holding paws.
+May shushed her quietly and helped her to lay out on her side before settling down with her. They curled together, still facing each other, nearly snout to snout and still holding paws.
 
 Ey stood and watched. Then ey sat on the beanbag and watched. Watched and waited, though for what ey didn't know.
 
@@ -185,6 +185,6 @@ She snorted. "God, no. I think she would lose it."
 
 "And hate every minute of it. You heard her, she likes who she was and all that she did. I cannot imagine her letting that go."
 
-Ey nodded and combed eir fingers through the fur on the nape of her neck. "So she'll be left with a complex view of that --- or, well, a couple of them, I guess --- maybe enough for her change how she moves through the world. Think it'll be enough for Jonas?"
+Ey nodded and combed eir fingers through the fur on the nape of her neck. "So she'll be left with a complex view of that --- or, well, a couple of them, I guess --- maybe enough for her to change how she moves through the world. Think it'll be enough for Jonas?"
 
 The skunk rolled until her face was nearly pressed against eir belly to let em pet. "I do not know," she mumbled. "I do not think even she knows."