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writing/post-self/neviim/local/codrin/008.md

@@ -18,7 +18,7 @@ Ey tilted eir head, noting the confusion on eir side of the table at the choppy,
 
 The greetings continued down the line. Tycho and Stolon greeted each other as scientists. Iska, who startled em in their resemblance to Debarre, and Why Ask Questions greeted each other, followed last of all by Artante Diria and Sarah.
 
-There was a small shuffle as the delegates from both craft sat at the table, Iska politely requesting that their chair be raised and the surface area made smaller so that they could more effectively reach the table, which True Name accomplished with a gesture. Both of Turun Ka and Turun Ko set their chairs aside and squatted down on their haunches before the table instead.
+There was a small shuffle as the delegates from both craft sat at the table, Iska politely requesting that their chair be raised and the surface area made smaller so that they could more effectively reach the table, which True Name accomplished with a gesture. Both Turun Ka and Turun Ko set their chairs aside and squatted down on their haunches before the table instead.
 
 "Thank you once again, and welcome to this convergence," Turun Ka said. Its voice was pleasantly musical. "It is a pleasure to meet those who are new and different from us, and we are always grateful when luck and chance allow us to do so."
 
@@ -48,7 +48,7 @@ The response was quick in coming. "We have divided civilizations up into a range
 
 "*Lu,*" Stolon said, speaking slowly. "Planetary scale for us. For other three races."
 
-True Name glance to Codrin, ensuring that ey was taking notes. "Thank you. Would you like to go next, leader Turun Ka?"
+True Name glanced to Codrin, ensuring that ey was taking notes. "Thank you. Would you like to go next, leader Turun Ka?"
 
 "Yes. By what means do you collect the materials needed for your civilization, whether for the embodied world or this one?"
 

writing/post-self/neviim/remote/tycho/001.md

@@ -12,7 +12,7 @@ Why Ask Questions --- or perhaps Answers Will Not Help --- had calmed down, at l
 
 Codrin bore eir usual curious, attentive expression. Something about em seemed to suggest that, when working, ey became a camera of sorts, taking in all light, all sound, all sensation and storing it away for future reference. Even when the façade of work dropped, ey seemed built to witness.
 
-Sarah, too, bore a look of calm curiosity. He figured she would be, in her own way, working the hardest of the group. She was the one tasked with watching the ways in which the Artemisians acted, trying to deduce some clear picture of them as individuals and as a society.
+Sarah, too, wore a look of calm curiosity. He figured she would be, in her own way, working the hardest of the group. She was the one tasked with watching the ways in which the Artemisians acted, trying to deduce some clear picture of them as individuals and as a society.
 
 Tycho wished for that same sense of calm, of stability.
 
@@ -64,7 +64,7 @@ Iska cocked their head in a familiar gesture of confusion.
 
 The secondracer bowed, their short ears canted back. "We will have to share knowledge on this during our talks."
 
-Sarah spoke up next. "I am a psychologist and therapist. I study the way people think and help them by listening. I have a particular interest in being here to see the ways in which we are similar or different in how we think, solve problems, approach the world, and so on."
+Sarah spoke up next. "I am a psychologist and therapist. I study the way people think and help them by listening. I have a particular interest in being here to see the ways in which we are similar or different in how we learn, solve problems, approach the world, and so on."
 
 Artante smiled. "I serve a similar role, representative Sarah Genet. I listen and I talk and I help. That is my role here, as well. Iska will bring back the story, and I will aid in understanding."
 
@@ -80,7 +80,7 @@ They bowed their head. "It will remain available. Please ask if you require. Tim
 
 "We had wondered about that," Codrin said. "Your reply to our letters was almost instantaneous. Even when we had several instances of a single individual working on a problem, we were slower."
 
-"Some problems are harder to work on in parallel than others," Artante said.
+"Some problems are more difficult to work on in parallel than others," Artante said.
 
 "I suppose responding to a letter is one of those, yeah, unless it's responding to otherwise unconnected points in a letter."
 
@@ -136,8 +136,8 @@ The soft-furred secondracer stood still for a moment, squinted. "You should be l
 
 "If I walk backward, time moves forward. If I walk forward, time rushes on," she gasped out, then laughed hoarsely. "If I stand still, the world moves around me!"
 
-True Name jolted at the brief recitation, standing quickly and taking her cocladist by the elbow. "Come on, my dear. Let us get to the unison room."
+True Name jolted at the brief recitation, standing quickly and taking her cocladist by the elbow. "Come on, my dear. Let us get to the room."
 
 Tycho looked to Codrin, who only frowned.
 
-Something had happened, just then. Something of import. He had no clue as to what it had been, though and neither did he understand how, he realized, but he knew that it was something distressing. Something wrong.
+Something had happened, just then. Something of import. He had no clue as to what it had been, though. Neither did he understand how, he realized, but he knew that it was something distressing. Something wrong.