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writing/post-self/neviim/local/codrin/009.md

@@ -10,7 +10,7 @@ Ey initially found it strange that added downtime would make the their party mor
 
 And through it all, True Name seemed to be trying to match the firstracers for patient expressions.
 
-It wasn't until that second lunch that the skunk showed any cracks. She picked up a plate piled high with salad, brought it over to the table in the center of their rest area then stepped back a few paces, where she activated a cone of silence. She brought her tail around toward her front, held in both paws, and buried her face in it. Ey could only assume by the sudden way that she bent at the waist and pinned her ears back that this was done to muffle a scream or some violent obscenity.
+It wasn't until that second lunch that the skunk showed any breaks in that patience. She picked up a plate piled high with salad, brought it over to the table in the center of their rest area then stepped back a few paces, where she activated a cone of silence. She brought her tail around toward her front, held in both paws, and buried her face in it. Ey could only assume by the sudden way that she bent at the waist and pinned her ears back that this was done to muffle a scream or some violent obscenity.
 
 Lunch after that had been filled with laughter and truly terrible jokes. Sarah, it turned out, collected them, and the delegates unanimously voted hers the worst.
 
@@ -60,7 +60,7 @@ Sarah leaned forward, elbows on her knees, and ey did the same. The added secrec
 
 The psychologist frowned down toward the floor. "What form did this hint take?"
 
-Ey dredged up the memory of the postscript, saying, "Ey asked Dear to check eir work. I remember that, during Secession, Why Ask Questions managed sentiment sys-side and Answers Will Not Help did the same phys-side. The hint was asking, "Is this correct? I've only met the two of them recently, so I’m unsure how that plays out in their social interactions." I remember that, of course, so the hint is in the question."
+Ey dredged up the memory of the postscript. "Ey asked Dear to check eir work. I remember that, during Secession, Why Ask Questions managed sentiment sys-side and Answers Will Not Help did the same phys-side. The hint was asking, "Is this correct? I've only met the two of them recently, so I’m unsure how that plays out in their social interactions." I remember that, of course, so the hint is in the question."
 
 "Anything in subsequent letters?"
 
@@ -90,7 +90,7 @@ Ey nodded. "There's some subtext there that I'm not totally picking up on, and i
 
 "Any guesses as to that subtext?" she asked.
 
-"Only incomplete ones. I wonder if it's to keep Codrin#Assist from reading too much into it since ey's not experiencing any of this other than the briefest glimpses at Why Ask Questions when ey brings the mail."
+"Only incomplete ones. I wonder if it's to keep Codrin#Assist from reading too much into it since ey's not experiencing any of this."
 
 "And you're worried ey might bring it up with the Odists?"
 
@@ -104,7 +104,7 @@ She grinned. "Alright. Keep me up to date, I guess."
 
 Codrin dropped the cone of silence and stretched eir arms up over eir head, "I'll see you in there in a few, then. Thanks for chatting."
 
-Sarah stood, waved, and wandered back into the room, leaving em to brush out eir tunic and straighten the apron that rested over eir skirt before starting the note.
+Sarah stood, waved, and wandered back into the room, leaving em to brush out eir blouse and straighten the apron that rested over eir skirt before starting the note.
 
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