update from sparkleup

writing/post-self/mitzvot/027.md

@@ -120,7 +120,7 @@ True Name leaned back against the couch and stared out the picture windows into
 
 Ioan nodded, saying, "Sort of like Michelle and Sasha?"
 
-She laughed. "No, not quite like that, thankfully. There are some similarities --- the sense of there being two parts of me, the internal split --- but it is lacking the dire nature, whatever it was that made her completely helpless before the duality of her self. It is still something that I can override. I can respond as True Name would or as End Waking would, but I am still just me, and I am learning to unify those natures. I will perhaps never be singular, but I am at least becoming a synthesis."
+She laughed. "No, not quite like that, thankfully. There are some similarities --- the sense of there being two parts of me, the internal split --- but it is lacking the dire nature, whatever it was that made her completely helpless before the duality of her self. It is still something that I can override. I can respond as True Name would or as End Waking would, but I am still just me, and I am learning to unify those natures. I will perhaps never be singular, but I will doubtless unify into a synthesis before long, just not yet."
 
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@@ -130,11 +130,11 @@ May fiddled with eir sweater vest from where she lay against em. "I will admit t
 
 She winced. "That bad?"
 
-"Uncomfortable," the other skunk corrected. "But if I wanted to remain comfortable, I would have pushed back when you urged me to accept."
+"Uncomfortable," the other skunk corrected. " I do wish perhaps that I had been able to fork or that I had been more cautious with the merge, but if I wanted to remain comfortable, I would have pushed back when you urged me to accept."
 
 "What about May's merge would've been easier?" Ioan asked.
 
-"Easier does not feel like the correct word. It would have been more comfortable. I would have understood the resentment that others feel for me, but it would not be the defining factor of the merge."
+"Again, easier does not feel like the correct word. It would have been more comfortable. I would have understood the resentment that others feel for me if that was a goal, but it would not be the defining factor of the merge."
 
 "End Waking mentioned that he defined himself by not being you, yeah."
 
@@ -158,7 +158,7 @@ May sighed and brushed her paws up over her head. "I said that I was working as
 
 A silence stretched out once more.
 
-Eventually, Ioan leaned over to tug at one of her ears gently. "Skunks are so complicated."
+Eventually, Ioan reached up to tug at one of her ears gently. "Skunks are so complicated."
 
 She let out a pent up breath as a laugh. "I know, my dear. I am sorry. I am sorry to both of you. I believed it to be a small untruth. I wanted my relationship with True Name to seem simpler than it was to keep you feeling comfortable. I hoped that that would keep you from digging into my past. Fat load of good that did."
 
@@ -174,21 +174,21 @@ Ey laughed. "Really, *really* complicated."
 
 "Very." May turned her gaze back to True Name and said, "I have my apprehensions about merging, though. *We* have our apprehensions, I mean. After watching what happened with End Waking's merge, it all felt so much more complicated."
 
-"I do not know," she said, voice distant. "I said that I understand your reasons for what you did. You wanted me to change, to be other than I am. You want me to be able to approach Jonas in some new way that will hopefully allow me to come out the other side with fewer assassins on my tail, yes?"
+"I do not know," she said, voice distant. "I said that I understand your reasons for what you did. You wanted me to change, you said, to be other than I am. You want me to be able to approach Jonas in some new way that will hopefully allow me to come out the other side with fewer assassins on my tail, yes?"
 
 May nodded.
 
-"And I also think I understand your reasons for wanting to merge down. It would make me understand your compunctions about me in a very real way, and would make me all the more complete a person in your eyes, yes?"
+"And I also think I understand your reasons for wanting to merge down. It would make me understand your relationship to me me in a very real way, and would make me all the more complete a person in your eyes, yes?"
 
 Another nod.
 
-"I am amenable to both of those, then, though perhaps my reasons differ. But, May Then My Name, coming at this with both full knowledge and as an open conversation has me feeling more positive than perhaps you do," she said, voice having lost its thoughtful edge. "You are a fundamentally good person and that is not something that I take lightly. You work on such a small scale and I have spoken against that in the past, but...well, a threat on one's life is a pretty good way to make one realize that the small scale is still important."
+"I am amenable to both of those, though perhaps my reasons differ. But, May Then My Name, coming at this with both full knowledge and as an open conversation has me feeling more positive than perhaps you do," she said, voice having lost its thoughtful edge. "You are a fundamentally good person and that is not something that I take lightly. You work on such a small scale and I have spoken against that in the past, but...well, a threat on one's life is a pretty good way to make one realize that the small scale is still important."
 
 "But Ioan and I--"
 
-"I would have full knowledge of your apprehensions as well, would I not?" She held up her hands, smiling. "I am not trying to talk you into it right now, my dear, and I would still like to hear those apprehensions regardless of the decision, I am simply explaining that, given this shitty fucking month, you merging down does not at all sound bad."
+"I would have full knowledge of your apprehensions as well, would I not?" She held up her hands, smiling. "I am not trying to talk you into it, my dear, and I would still like to hear those apprehensions regardless, I am simply explaining that, given this shitty fucking month, you merging down does not at all sound bad."
 
-Ioan realized ey'd settled back into observing mode, simply watching silently. Not what ey was supposed to be working on. Ey shook emself back to the present and said, "My apprehensions mostly boil down to the fact that the merge would include May and I's entire relationship. The memories are one thing, and there are some that are pretty intensely personal, but you'd also wind up with the feelings that resulted from the formation of those memories."
+Ioan realized ey'd settled back into observing mode, simply watching silently. Not what ey was supposed to be working on. Ey shook emself back to the present and said, "My apprehensions mostly boil down to the fact that the merge would include May and I's entire relationship. The memories are one thing, and there are some that are pretty intensely personal, but you'd also risk winding up with the feelings that resulted from the formation of those memories."
 
 True Name nodded.
 
@@ -196,7 +196,7 @@ Ey took a deep breath, trying to bolster eir courage with it. "This last month h
 
 "And you, May Then My Name? We do not need to go too far into them, but if it is to be a discussion, I would like to at least have these thoughts laid out for perusal."
 
-Eir partner was a long time in responding. "I am with Ioan on this, in that I am protective of my devotion to em. It...is difficult to say this so openly, but I am also realizing just how complex my feelings about you are after the events of the last month, and the root of resentment that led to me urging End Waking's merge on you is no longer there, or at least no longer quite so strong. I am uncomfortable pushing yet more resentment and difficulties on you. I do not want to hurt you."
+She was a long time in responding. "I am with Ioan on this, in that I am protective of my devotion to em. It...is difficult to say this so openly, but I am also realizing just how complex my feelings about you are after the events of the last month, and the root of resentment that led to me urging End Waking's merge on you is no longer there, or at least no longer quite so simple, no longer aimless hatred, however justified it may have felt. I am uncomfortable pushing yet more resentment and difficulties on you. I do not want to hurt you."
 
 The longer May spoke, the more thoughtful True Name's expression became. She slouched down on the couch, until her head was resting against the back cushions. "I am not sure what to say to this just yet."