update from sparkleup

writing/post-self/neviim/ioan/011.md

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 Ioan,
 
-I must admit, I'm really not sure what to say about all of this. Thank you for waiting until you have a substantial amount to send to me, at least. Dear threw a little tantrum about about this "We have received messages over the last few days" bit, but I appreciate having an initial digest to work with so that I'm not left a fretting mess (as you say you were) by the simple news that, oh look, aliens! I threatened to bundle it up in blankets until it was immobile for a few hours, though, and it calmed down. I may do so anyway.
+I must admit, I'm really not sure what to say about all of this. Thank you for waiting until you have a substantial amount to send to me, at least. Dear threw a little tantrum about this "We have received messages over the last few days" bit, but I appreciate having an initial digest to work with so that I'm not left a fretting mess (as you say you were) by the simple news that, oh look, aliens! I threatened to bundle it up in blankets until it was immobile for a few hours, though, and it calmed down. I may do so anyway.
 
 Four races! Five thousand years! One language! Have you learned any of that, yourself? And yet maybe it's all a dream! Truly fascinating. As you can imagine, Dear latched onto that quite quickly.
 

writing/post-self/neviim/remote/codrin/004.md

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 > *Convergence T-minus 1 day, 4 hours, 7 minutes*
 
-The Artemisians had continued to fine-tune the new setup of the meeting space for the emissaries, so that the Odists beds were no longer in the same room as their half of the table. Now, there was a small, stone-paved unison room  for their half of the table, at the back of which sat a low bench for sitting and talking, as well as a pitcher and glasses of water. To the side of that, a short hallway led to the two unison bedrooms.
+The Artemisians had continued to fine-tune the new setup of the meeting space for the emissaries, so that the Odists' beds were no longer in the same room as their half of the table. Now, there was a small, stone-paved unison room  for their half of the table, at the back of which sat a low bench for sitting and talking, as well as a pitcher and glasses of water. To the side of that, a short hallway led to the two unison bedrooms.
 
 That True Name and Answers Will Not Help had requested separate bedrooms had felt notable to Codrin, though ey could not put eir finger on why. Perhaps one or both of them were having a hard enough time even while sleeping that it was keeping the other awake? Answers Will Not Help certainly looked as though she'd not slept since arriving.
 
@@ -60,7 +60,7 @@ Tycho nodded. "Agreed, though I have to admit that I'm getting kind of bored. Co
 
 He nodded. "I knew that going into this that #Castor would be having much more fun than I would."
 
-"Well, lets see if we can find you something to focus on," Sarah said.
+"Well, let's see if we can find you something to focus on," Sarah said.
 
 He tilted his head, frowning. "How, though? I can't exactly ask us to just start talking about the science side."
 
@@ -94,7 +94,7 @@ Codrin stood up straight again, tugging eir blouse straight. "Are you saying you
 
 He nodded.
 
-Sarah shook her head. "To make sure I'm following, you think they may have suspected there was life elsewhere? Do you think the might have run across other possible societies and not had them join them as a race?"
+Sarah shook her head. "To make sure I'm following, you think they may have suspected there was life elsewhere? Do you think they might have run across other possible societies and not had them join them as a race?"
 
 "Right. Could be they just hadn't started uploading." He hesitated, then added, "Or that they had, but didn't want to join or didn't make the cut."
 
@@ -146,7 +146,7 @@ Ey nodded. "If there was strife, it may not have been a good convergence, you me
 
 "Precisely." The skunk wobbled to her feet, accepting Codrin's offer of a hand to steady herself. "Come. Let us see how Why Ask Questions is doing. Better, I hope."
 
-"Given the differences between our systems, the focus on time skew versus forking, I'd like to see what some of the political and sociological differences there are that result from that," Codrin said, once the meeting began again.
+"Given the differences between our systems, the focus on time skew versus forking, I'd like to see what some of the political and sociological differences there are that resulted from that," Codrin said, once the meeting began again.
 
 Both Iska and True Name sat up straighter.
 
@@ -172,7 +172,7 @@ Codrin allowed the moment to pass before continuing. "Thank you. For what occupa
 
 Iska was practically purring at this turn in the conversation. "Had one of us asked that question, I would have said 'no', but hearing it from you has made me think about it in a new way. I would have said that one simply would not think to take up that activity, but now that you say such, I think that this is the case. I am uncomfortable with not utilizing skew, yes, but for activities that are pinned to common time such as preparing food and performing music, there is an expectation that I would not be a good chef or musician, yes. Were I to pick up an interest in cooking, I would be looked on with a small amount of concern. One would say about me: "I hope that they do not burn the food by shifting to slow-time" or "I expect that their food will be very rushed"."
 
-Codrin grinned as ey took down notes of the answer. "One of my romantic partners, as an instance artist, has stated that it can't understand what a life without profligate forking would look like, but has never said that it feels as though it is not able to take part in another profession. That said, there are several interests or professions that one would not expect taskers or even trackers to go into. Many would sneer at a tasker trying to go into instance artistry. Does the same apply here? Are there more interests or profession that are out of reach for those who do not use skew than for those who use skew often?"
+Codrin grinned as ey took down notes of the answer. "One of my romantic partners, as an instance artist, has stated that it can't understand what a life without profligate forking would look like, but has never said that it feels as though it is not able to take part in another profession. That said, there are several interests or professions that one would not expect taskers or even trackers to go into. Many would sneer at a tasker trying to go into instance artistry. Does the same apply here? Are there more interests or professions that are out of reach for those who do not use skew than for those who use skew often?"
 
 Another, longer blurred conference followed this question, during which True Name gave em a tired smile. "Excellent questions, Mx. Bălan."
 
@@ -186,11 +186,11 @@ Sarah sat forward, leaning on her elbows on the table. "Can you expand on 'prest
 
 "We have decided that there are not any that are seen as distasteful," Turun Ka said after another conferral with its delegates. "But there are many that are seen as frivolous. Some view contemplative or spiritual life as frivolous, particularly among secondrace, which is very old."
 
-Codrin frowned, making a note to ask about that later. They had the concept of spirituality, and even the concept of a life lived in in contemplation. It raised several other questions besides, such as why it was that the second oldest race bore the brunt of that assumption, and why it had been implied that firstrace was immune. Were religions shared between the races? Were religions time-bound? In eir 128 years of life, time had run out on countless end-of-the-world predictions.
+Codrin frowned, making a note to ask about that later. They had the concept of spirituality, and even the concept of a life lived in contemplation. It raised several other questions besides, such as why it was that the second oldest race bore the brunt of that assumption, and why it had been implied that firstrace was immune. Were religions shared between the races? Were religions time-bound? In eir 128 years of life, time had run out on countless end-of-the-world predictions.
 
-Ey shook the rumination from eir eyes in time to hear True Name asking, "What is the population's the view of the Council of Eight?"
+Ey shook the rumination from eir eyes in time to hear True Name asking, "What is the population's view of the Council of Eight?"
 
-Turun Ka rocked its head from side to side. Amusement, Codrin#Castor had written. "We are seen as almost vestigial except during convergences. What guidance we provide we do so through through advisory not--"
+Turun Ka rocked its head from side to side. Amusement, Codrin#Castor had written. "We are seen as almost vestigial except during convergences. What guidance we provide we do so through advisory not--"
 
 It was interrupted by a bang as Answers Will Not Help, who had been nearly in a stupor up until this point, slammed her fists down on the table. "I must keep no veil between me and my words. I must set no stones between me and my actions!"