update from sparkleup

writing/post-self/mitzvot/012.md

@@ -46,7 +46,7 @@ That was enough for now, though. Ey got started going through the room from top
 
 She stood silent and still for nearly a minute, leaving em to fidget while May looked on, frowning.
 
-Finally, she cleared her throat and said hoarsely. "This is more than enough, my dear. I do not know why you two...but, well, perhaps I should get cleaned up and then we can talk proper. I am perhaps a little too emotional for that at the moment."
+Finally, she cleared her throat and said hoarsely. "This is more than enough, my dear. I do not know why you two...but, well, I should get cleaned up and then we can talk proper. I am perhaps a little too emotional for that at the moment."
 
 May sighed, nodded. "At your own pace."
 
@@ -62,7 +62,7 @@ She shrugged. "It is much easier to hate from a distance. Especially when one is
 
 "To love?"
 
-She nodded.
+She pressed her face against eir chest, sighed.
 
 Ey wanted to ask her how well that fit her monologue, that idea that to be built to love is to be built to hate yourself. Ey wanted to go back sixteen hours or however long it had been and kick Jonas's ass. Ey wanted to go back twenty-four hours and warn True Name, to go back three and a half years and warn the True Name ey'd first gotten coffee with.
 
@@ -78,7 +78,7 @@ May let out a snort of laughter. "I am sorry, True Name. I do not mean to laugh,
 
 The skunk canted her ears back. "I am in shock, May Then My Name. My coworker of two centuries just tried to kill me. My life's work has been cut off from me. I have been invited to stay with one of the two up-tree instances of mine who dislike me the most, and I have never had to live with anyone before, not since before we uploaded. The offer remains for me to dig my own sim."
 
-Eir partner bowed apologetically.
+May bowed apologetically.
 
 "I'd feel better if you stayed," Ioan admitted. "It'd be too easy for you to either disappear into your new sim forever or wind up with another attempt on your life whenever you left."
 
@@ -102,7 +102,7 @@ The skunk blinked a few times, then smiled cautiously. "Understood."
 
 "If we fight, we fight," she said. "But if we are to be stuck together, then we will fucking get over it and have a civil house, at the very least. I will do all of the exercises Sarah has given me at once if that is what is needed to keep home from becoming unbearable."
 
-True Name nodded in agreement. "I will do what I can to keep things comfortable. We will work it out if one of us gets upset. That includes you, Mx. Bălan. Please voice your concerns when they arise."
+True Name nodded in agreement. "I will do what I can to keep things comfortable and be out of your hair as soon as this is resolved. We will work it out if one of us gets upset. That includes you, Mx. Bălan. Please voice your concerns when they arise."
 
 Ey shook eir head. "Alright, alright. Only concerns I have right now are taking a shower and a nap, then. I'll trust you two to make things work and will try not to mediate every single little disagreement."
 

writing/post-self/mitzvot/013.md

@@ -1,8 +1,8 @@
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-The next few days felt careful. They weren't walking on eggshells around each other. It was not a worry of offending, but they all seemed to be hyper-aware of each others' presence in the house.
+The next few days felt careful. They weren't walking on eggshells around each other, it was not a worry of offending, but they all seemed to be hyper-aware of each others' presence in the house.
 
-Ioan and May called out from their performances and, when A Finger Pointing asked why, May had spent half an hour locked in the bedroom on a silenced sensorium conversation. Ioan received a very sincere note soon after wishing both May and em, as well as True Name well. While she'd never spent much time worrying about the things True Name did, A Finger Pointing's tireless desire to be friends with everyone did not exclude her cross-tree instance.
+Ioan and May called out from their performances and, when A Finger Pointing asked why, May had spent half an hour locked in the bedroom on a silenced sensorium conversation. Ioan received a very sincere note soon after wishing all three of them well. While she'd never spent much time worrying about the things True Name did, A Finger Pointing's tireless desire to be friends with everyone did not exclude her cross-tree instance.
 
 For her part, True Name spent much of the first day silent in her room, though whether that was to sleep or salvage the situation, ey couldn't tell. She poked her head out around dinner and said that she was too tired to join and that she would see them in the morning. 
 
@@ -36,13 +36,13 @@ And so it continued. They would speak in the morning and over dinner, perhaps a
 
 Even the weather felt careful. The snow first melted and then was replaced when a new storm lay down a delicate few inches.
 
-It was the third full day since their return when the spell was broken. Shortly after lunch, True Name stepped into her field of view, bowed, and politely requested a conversation with May.
+It was the third full day since their return when the spell was broken. Shortly after lunch, True Name stepped into May's field of view, bowed, and politely requested a conversation with her.
 
 The skunk frowned and beckoned her over to the couch.
 
 True Name apologized to Ioan, then set up a cone of silence with secure visual ACLs.
 
-Three days was just long enough to start building up the scaffolding of habits, such that Ioan was left anxious and jittery when they were jostled.. Seeing it from the outside for the first time, ey was left with a slight sense of disorientation from the way the cone blurred both the occupants and the background, the edges of its boundaries unnervingly sharp.
+Three days was just long enough to start building up the scaffolding of habits, such that Ioan was left anxious and jittery when they were jostled. Seeing it from the outside for the first time, ey was left with a slight sense of disorientation from the way the cone blurred both the occupants and the background, the edges of its boundaries unnervingly sharp.
 
 There was nothing to be gained from watching the indistinct shapes within. A quiet conversation had them simply looking like two black forms against the relative brightness of the balcony. Ey couldn't see expressions, couldn't see but the most grandiose of body language.
 
@@ -54,7 +54,7 @@ The conversation lasted nearly an hour, and when the cone dropped, ey was greete
 
 Ey ducked around the kitchen counter as quickly as ey could. "May? True Name? Are you--"
 
-May waved a hand dismissively and blipped out of the sim. There was a sensorium ping a moment later, a view of Arrowhead Lake.
+May waved a paw dismissively and blipped out of the sim. There was a sensorium ping a moment later, a view of Arrowhead Lake.
 
 "What just happened?"