update from sparkleup

writing/post-self/toledot/launch/sys/Ioan/005.md

@@ -12,7 +12,7 @@ Ioan smiled and jotted down the date. "Thanks. What led you to upload?"
 
 "That makes sense. Not much of that to worry about here."
 
-"Sometimes I think it must've been early onset Alzheimer's." She laughed. "I'm just a little spacey, is all."
+"Sometimes I think it must've been early onset Alzheimer's." She laughed. "I just get a little spacey, is all."
 
 "It's easy enough to do. I get stuck thinking about whatever sometimes," ey said.
 
@@ -24,13 +24,13 @@ She nodded. "Composer, conductor, violinist. Have you heard any of my stuff?"
 
 "I listened to some while I was preparing for our meeting." Ioan smiled sheepishly. "I'll admit that much of it was over my head, but I can certainly see the skill behind it, and you play beautifully."
 
-"Thank you," she said, giving a hint of a bow. "For both of them, I mean. I sometimes enjoy writing stuff that's hard to grasp. It makes for an experience of its own. Bafflement, confusion, lack of understanding, those are all feelings, and music is supposed to toy with feelings."
+"Thank you for saying so," she said, giving a hint of a bow. "For both of them, I mean. I sometimes enjoy writing stuff that's hard to grasp. It makes for an experience of its own. Bafflement, confusion, lack of understanding, those are all feelings, and music is supposed to toy with feelings."
 
 "That's something I can appreciate, as well."
 
-"I'm sure you can, with your work with the Odists." Renee grinned at eir confusion. "I read up on you, as well. They sound like a wild bunch."
+"I'm sure you can, with your work with the Odists." Renee grinned at eir confusion. "I read up on you as well. They sound like a wild bunch."
 
-Ey laughed. "I'll say. You were a musician before uploading, too, correct?"
+"I'll say." Ey laughed. "You were a musician before uploading, too, correct?"
 
 "Oh, yes! One of those lucky few who got to do what she loved for a living. I think that's why I uploaded, in the end. Getting a terminal diagnosis didn't really make me depressed in and of itself. What got to me was the thought that that would mean I wouldn't be able to play or write anymore. I've seen people go through treatment, and none of them are in any shape to play an instrument."
 
@@ -64,7 +64,7 @@ She shrugged. "Not sure about an average person. It was about six months' saving
 
 Ioan laughed. "Of course. That makes sense. Did your music change after you uploaded?"
 
-"I wrote a lot more violin works," she said, grinning. "After all, I could fork and play as many parts as I wanted. Or could afford, at least. It still cost a bit to fork back then. I also made a few instruments up here that I could only describe in order to let phys-side know how to make. Concerts were much easier to have, because schedules are easier to coordinate when you're not restricted to just one version of yourself. Music started to drift between sys-side and phys-side --- stylistically, I mean. I got some iffy reviews of stuff offline that went over pretty well here."
+"I wrote a lot more string works," she said, grinning. "After all, I could fork and play as many parts as I wanted. Or could afford, at least. It still cost a bit to fork back then. I also made a few instruments up here that I could only describe in order to let phys-side know how to make. Concerts were much easier to have, because schedules are easier to coordinate when you're not restricted to just one version of yourself. Music started to drift between sys-side and phys-side --- stylistically, I mean. I got some iffy reviews of stuff offline that went over pretty well here."
 
 "What happened to music phys-side that didn't here?"
 
@@ -86,7 +86,7 @@ That evening, back at eir house, after ey had merged eir work-forks, after ey ha
 
 "You were frowning. What happened? Getting tired of my cooking?"
 
-"No, it's good. Just thinking about something Dear#Castor talked about today." Ey stabbed at a spear of asparagus. "Ey interviewed some asshole author was working on a book on both launches, but intentionally not communicating to see how they would diverge."
+"No, it's good. Just thinking about something Codrin#Castor talked about today." Ey stabbed at a spear of asparagus. "Ey interviewed some asshole author was working on a book on both launches, but intentionally not communicating to see how they would diverge."
 
 "Sounds fun enough," May said. "But, if I am thinking of the same author, it will be quite boring."
 
@@ -98,9 +98,9 @@ May shrugged. "I am up for it, if all three of our groups agree."
 
 "Did either of them have any suggestions for where to look next?"
 
-"Nothing in particular," Ioan said around a bite of fish. "Sorry. I figure stuff like why invested in one or the other is a project that could go on forever, based on the numbers. Sure, there are only two hundred or so that only invested in the launches, but the numbers are much higher on our end."
+"Nothing in particular," Ioan said around a bite of fish. "Sorry. I figure stuff like why one invested in one or the other is a project that could go on forever, based on the numbers. Sure, there are only two hundred or so clades that totally invested in the launches, but the numbers are much higher on our end."
 
-"You are thinking about the Secession, are you not?" May smiled. "Clever, clever."
+"You are thinking about Secession, are you not?" May smiled. "Clever, clever."
 
 "Am I that transparent?"
 
@@ -114,7 +114,7 @@ Ey laughed. "Well, how much of the Council of Eight remains?"
 
 "No. Remember I am curious to see who you find first." They ate in silence for a bit, before May spoke up. "Do you remember what I said about Michelle?"
 
-"That she was instrumental to the Secession, yeah. I was thinking of hunting down some Odists."
+"That she was instrumental to Secession, yeah. I was thinking of hunting down some Odists."
 
 "A good bet, that." She looked down at her plate and said, more quietly, "Ask the first lines."