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<li><a href="#1.html">#1</a> — Jonas seems to have gotten all that he wanted out of True Name, so the inciting incident of the story is him attempting to assassinate her. Her final instance is rescued by Ioan who brings her to the lake that has featured in other stories and on the back cover of <em>Nevi’im</em> to get away from the assassin. Realizing just how totally fucked she is, she’s overcome by emotion and wades out into the water until it’s nearly up to her hips and screams in frustration. This is my first choice, as I feel that it continues on from the overwhelming emotion on the cover of <em>Nevi’im</em> and also allows for further messing with the shape of the letters. Still, few more ideas below!</li>
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<li><a href="#2.html">#2</a> — True Name agrees to let May merge down with her for the first time in 245 years. They kneel together on a bed, facing each other while True Name struggles to accept that many memories, May trying to be comforting as she can, while Ioan watches from the side. This is my second choice, as the rest of the book is more focused on emotions and how they tie in with memories, which is way more sedate than assassination attempts (plus, double the Odists that could be cut into by the letters). This would also work for a back cover, I figure.</li>
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<li><a href="#3.html">#3</a> — True Name has been spending in the woods around the lake with her newfound desire for solitude, getting away from May and Ioan. What none of them realize, however, is that the sim isn’t as private as expected, and one of Jonas’s cronies (and True Name’s ex), Zacharias, comes to visit and taunt her. He’s a pretty standard red fox, dressing as dapper as Dear does and keeps an affected cane with him. True Name panics and messages May and Ioan, who arrive to confront Zacharias. May tries to taunt him in turn and he gets frustrated enough that he slaps her across the face. There’s quite a bit to the scene, some of which may make for cover material.</li>
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<li><a href="#3.html">#3</a> — True Name has been spending in the woods around the lake with her newfound desire for solitude, getting away from May and Ioan. What none of them realize, however, is that the sim isn’t as private as expected, and one of Jonas’s cronies (and True Name’s ex), Zacharias, comes to visit and taunt her. True Name panics and messages May and Ioan, who arrive to confront Zacharias. May tries to taunt him in turn and he gets frustrated enough that he slaps her across the face. There’s quite a bit to the scene, some of which may make for cover material.</li>
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<h2 id="back">Back</h2>
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<p>I still like the idea of having an open door somewhere in the image. Nice to have, but not required.</p>
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<li><a href="#5.html">#5</a> — After the merge, True Name has picked up May’s affectionate streak and gets all cozy on Ioan a couple of times (a few times as Sasha; see <a href="#characters.html">the characters section</a>. The mood is kind of cuddly but also super awkward because neither of them know what to do about it at all given their history with her as True Name, but also May’s memories of her and Ioan together.</li>
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<li><a href="#6.html">#6</a> — May gives a monologue at one point, looking drunken and melancholic in a bar-setting on a stage</li>
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<h2 id="characters">Characters</h2>
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<dt>Ioan Bălan</dt>
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<dd>No change</dd>
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<dt>Douglas Hadje</dt>
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<dd>Tall, slim, curly black hair, tan skin (though, as he’s a Canadian, still a white guy).</dd>
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<dt>May Then My Name/True Name/skunk-type Odists</dt>
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<dd>No change - <a href="https://where-it-watches-the-slow-hours-progress.ode.clade.id">ref</a></dd>
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<dt>Zacharias</dt>
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<dd>A foppish red fox — dresses a bit like Dear, carries an affected cane</dd>
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<dt>Jonas</dt>
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<dd>Tall, slender, sandy blond hair that’s sort of artfully tousled but clearly done intentionally, well dressed, ‘perilously handsome’, slimy politician</dd>
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<dt>Sasha</dt>
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<dd>Shaped rather like True Name, but a spotted skunk, so a shorter almost weasel-like muzzle, shorter tail, white splotch on the forehead but not white headfur, white splotches at the eyes, a bit of stripes around the back of the neck heading beneath clothing Usually seen in a linen tunic and pair of Thai fisherman pants.</dd>
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<h2 id="samples-referenced">Samples referenced</h2>
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<h3 id="1"><a name="1">#1</a></h3>
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<p>Eventually, True Name’s shoulders sagged and she stumbled down from the trees, Ioan and May both watching her, wide-eyed. She kept walking past the trail, down onto muddy beech, then out into the water. The short waves lapped up against her legs, soaking her slacks, and still she kept walking until it had made its way nearly up to her waist.</p>
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